Tumblewords

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Wednesday, September 12, 2007

Drought's End



dawn
dragged
downpour
roused the creek
to dastardly course
skipping from original bed
whitewater rackets over the edge to valley's lap



Watercolor sketch 2006

This fibonacci poem came from prompt words: skipping, original, racket from 3wordWednesday
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12 comments:

Anonymous said...

A great Fib. I love how it flows like the water. :)

Rose

xo

paisley said...

i loved this poem in form and in word.. the build up to the waters rushing over the bank... very visual... in fact i brought this form to the attention of my writers workshop group and hope to engage it myself....

Anonymous said...

Your words and the Fib form worked wonderfully together! It made me want to not just write a Fib for its form but to think of something the form fits next time. (Thanks a lot, Susan, that means more work, grin.)

Seems to be a lot of site template changing going around. Looks good on my computer screen.

poefusion said...

Your words, the Fib and the picture capture the essence of poetry at its best. Keep up the good work.

Michelle

Anonymous said...

I like the alliteration, the picture of dawn bringing downpour and the water filled image.

TC said...

I felt so bad for the valley by the end, like it was a person almost.

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get zapped said...

I felt like a log on a journey downstream. Great imagery!

sage said...

I like the build up in your poem.

One of my favorite memories from spending the summer of '88 in Idaho (year of the Yellowstone fires), is waking up in the middle of the night and (even though I was inside) tasting the rain. It was a short shower--but things had been so dry...

Greggo said...

i love the flow here (of the words, not the water! lol), and it makes me want to try a fib. i also love the painting - though i wish the image were larger.

Bone said...

Honestly, I'd never heard of fibonacci before, but googled it after I read your poem. So this was educational for me.

Thank you for participating.

RomanceWriter said...

Loved how vivid this poem was.