toxic black etchings
draw false over not,
verbal tsunamis flood
the deepest of vaults,
erase templates
of minions and
on wings of the wind
pull tight the frail lines
of fracture...erasing
the cloth of light
Response for Sunday Scribblings
fractals
toxic black etchings
draw false over not,
verbal tsunamis flood
the deepest of vaults,
erase templates
of minions and
on wings of the wind
pull tight the frail lines
of fracture...erasing
the cloth of light
20 comments:
I love how you excavate the most amazing words in your poems... minions, frail and fracture mixed so well.
Darkness becomes a blanket trapping the light.
I love the way you twist and turn your words.
Mmmm a reminder of "everything" lost in weather most foul! Brilliant as always!
I guess it must be cold there.
Very Cold!
"The cloth of light"
I love the image this conjures, especially on such a gray and cloudy day.
You cleverly use words to highlight emotion, I think. As I said it, I could feel it in the way I spoke.
Very ingenious.
Your command of words is simply awesome. Wonderful.
I love the phrase 'verbal tsunamis'. Really powerful word usage!
your vocabulary and word usage slays me.. i feel like a first grader when i come here....
Love the alliteration in here! verbal/vaults. wings/wind, frail/fracture. What an expert with words you are!
Your poetry always sounds so professional.
verbal tsunamis...
i felt this work deeply.
This poem really hits me, especially in these coldest, darkest, cruelest days of winter.
This poem is fabulous!
This hits me too. Delhi is unusally cold this time of the year.
fouled up, have you?
verbal tsunamis! the imagery there is powerful.
great post!
wonderful.
Wonderful words... as always!
Dee
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One of the reasons why I like analysis is because I believe our personal experiences color how we perceive literature and language. What I read here is what is processed as negative language can overwhelm us and affect our creativity or light.
easing the cloth of light... yes, i see it just over the horizon... another beautiful sight tw ...
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