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Friday, February 22, 2008

Faulting





probing each layer I peel my sins,
disrobing as if it were my body
remove timeworn transgressions
fold them neatly in special bins

stripped to innocent newness
awkward within my skin
I dress in faultless clothing
to acquire fresh and novel sins.




Second Chance is the prompt from Writers Island.

25 comments:

rebecca said...

your poetry always leaves me in awe. i am left speechless and sound elementary when i say that in two words they are always "brilliant" and "beautiful."

peeling away of our sins, disrobing, timeworn transgressions....to be stripped and found within awkward innocence ready to acquire new sins.....WOW...where does this come from? my hat off to you for another perfect post.

blessings,
rebecca

madamspud169 said...

"to acquire fresh and novel sins".

I just love this line, it's so expressive and strangely beautiful.

Q said...

Another in a series of great poems. I think you are ready for spring! I loved this one. The birds seemed to like it too. The woodpeckers outside the window listened to every word. I read it outloud to them twice.
Your basket of words is always full.
Sherry

noahthegreat said...

Definitely quite amazing.

You never seem to disappoint...

The starving is worth it, in my opinion!

Vic, the Cariboo Ponderer said...

Profound. I really could relate to that.

Greyscale Territory said...

"Special bins"! What an awesome thought! Almost an oxymoron! It's funny and serious all in one hit!

Great write!

Smiles and Light

gautami tripathy said...

Your poetry inspires me. Always. You touch new grounds in each of your poems. Thanks!

snooty to boot

paisley said...

makes me wish i'd saved at least one of the really good sins for later......

i love this....

Robin said...

I'm speechless right along with Rebecca, this is a tremendous piece of work.

The imagery is so very powerful. The stripping down of skin as if sins brings to mind CS Lewis' Voyage of the Dawn Treader, but brings it to a whole other level.

keith hillman said...

Simply wonderful as ever. I don't how you do it - I wish I did!

anthonynorth said...

Ah, to ever repeat that 'Eve' moment!
Magical. Where's that damned serpent :-)

Cricket's Hearth said...

Ahh, a second chance to "acquire fresh and novel sins" - what an amazing poem!

Selma said...

You ARE good!

Goodnight, Mom said...

Gorgeous, gorgeous. I love your words and the imagery of stripping down our sins. Gorgeous.

UL said...

disrobe and layer, but who cleans the inner self?

Susan Helene Gottfried said...

I love the visual image of this. What a neat idea.

ren.kat said...

I have missed reading your poems.

Rambler said...

"stripped to innocent newness"

nice words.. gave me a fresh feeling

Awareness said...

fresh and novel sins......superb line.

Though I think we have a tendancy to put on the same skin and jump right into the same sins from time to time.......we are often innocent lambs in our unawareness arent we?

what I like about our layers is that they are beautiful in their imperfections and scars that we have earned along the way from our attempts.........our living life.

thank you for sharing your talents with us every week Sue.

Jeques said...

The scars we get as we go on with life are the emblems in our slates, their meanings may not be appreciated for the moment but they are essential in completing the bigger picture of the story we weave as we live.

I wish you well.

~ Jeques

Leigh Lear said...

love the idea of stripping away our sins. great words.

LittleWing said...

that was a beautiful admission of our sins...i wonder..."awkward" in that we never fully let go...

Corina said...

What a gorgeous group of words, beautifully arranged. Quite a hopeful poem!

Scout said...

Wonderfully worded!

The last line is my favorite. It shows so much hope!

writerwoman said...

Wow. I like how this poem shows an unraveling and then shows renewal. Remarkable.