chimes scatter in the
early mist
chatter in an eerie
scale
notes curve tattered and
edgy
beyond where straw
skirts
the field and mirrored
lights
rise to seek the raw dawn
small against the vast
sky
she covers her eyes
and ears
and hungers as a
mother must
♥ ♥ ♥
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In the ending an animal rises. Clever and effective. It made me read the piece again through the animal's eyes. This is quite beautiful.
You paint a vivid scene!
Very atmospheric, Susan. A lovely write.
Pamela
Such a powerful piece in so few words - impressive ... I had to read it over a few times myself before I got the perspective correct ... very nice
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I really like notes curving tattered and edgy... and the ending is superb.
Raw indeed where everyday is a struggle to survive and doubly so to provide for the young ones as well. So easy to picture this as I read it.
Wonderful Sue, love the ending...
Wonderful verse and great use of that prompt!
Madeleine Begun Kane
haunting... makes me whif a scent
of Ireland.
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