brooding stars
broke night's edge
delivered little
points of flame
along the icy creek
against the dark
tangents popped
delivered little
points of flame
across the murky sky
rustling leaves
tumbled over snow
delivered little
points of flame
kneaded ice, moved on
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This is my fav of the day! I like the repeated line and what you created with the words!!
I too like the repeated line, and how it pulls the reader's attention to the whole.
Elizabeth
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Love brooding stars and murky sky... and the repitition, too. Happy New Year!
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minimal, but deep. I wrote of an icy creek as well - how could you not? : )
Nice star imagery! A starry 2013, may your wishes come true.
Nice repeatition, like a heart beat!
Utterly delightful. I read it three times - I loved it so much. The repetition works beautifully - each time. Such great imagery. Thank you.
Richard
Loved the repetition of "little points of flame." Strong and powerful!
Enjoying the natural flow of your words.
Thanks for your visit to 'Oddments'
You always deliver little points of flame too... Have a Happy New Year!
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