Tess Kincaid of Magpie Tales offers this visual prompt for writers.
Summer Evening, Edward Hopper, 1947
the future leaned
against a half wall of faultless
the locked door
hid what they didn't want to know
bathed in light
wrapped in dreamy visions
the locked door
hid what they'd come to know
sunset fell and morning rose
moths fluttered round the bulb
the locked door yawned
released a puff of careless thoughts
sent the future
reeling, undone and splintered
like the clapboard half wall
where dreams declined to nest
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Mysterious... I epecially like the third stanza.
Yes, there's always a locked door that hides what you don't want to know...
The door! Of course the door, love how you brought that element to the fore. Like it...lots!
Incredible write. 'the locked door yawned. released a puff of careless thoughts."
I love that.
-where dreams declined to nest- I love this line, a beautiful write as always.
A door hides and a door opens too , like releasing puffs of careless thoughts... Ah well....
nice..the third and fourth stanzas are esp tight, very nicely writen...oh once the door of careless thoughts are open it is sometimes hard to close...
Well done! I like especially how you used the 'locked door.'
Yes the locked door brings in the depth in this poem. Not just about a pretty summer evening but deeper and darker secrets.
Yep, I figured there was something else going on, too.
Yep, I figured there was something else going on, too.
This really builds with mystery..You caught me at the door...wondering..open/close...
The door got to me too...
Interesting slant on the prompt. Well done.
Locked doors hide everything. And careless thoughts do indeed send the future reeling. Lovely take on the prompt!
Oh this is so interesting to read and mysterious too. A great summer work, loved the artwork too. Spot on Sue!
The locked door that cannot stay locked for ever opening and releasing thoughts and things that have to be faced. Wonderful read.
I like the notion of the locked door yawning.
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