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Friday, May 14, 2010

Payday Friday for Big Tent Poetry

Big Tent Poetry   Write down any interesting words you hear. Pick them for sound, for interest, out of curiosity or for any reason that tickles or piques you.Write down a dozen words and then use three to six (or so) of them in a new poem.

Payday Friday

hemp's hazy smoke
circles plastic gods
who squat at the rail
like resplendent kumquats

appetites for right
explode over the tip jar
and bourbon furies
dent a silver shaker

one single nape
in each meaty hand
the hulky bouncer
bends raucous out the door

dusty rose fuchsias
gape and hug their pots
hemp's hazy smoke
circles plastic gods

Fractal image.
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Unknown said...

I love the first stanza and
"and bourbon furies/dent a silver shaker". Lovely words.

Cynthia Short said...

Ooh, "resplendent kumquats"! what a wonderful merge of words!
I love the thought of the smoky bar, where everyone drinks the week's pay...the only thing, the "plastic gods" are very intriguing and I want to know exactly what they are!

Sam Liu said...

I loved the vibrant imagery of this piece, this description is wonderful. Great poem.

Stan Ski said...

Spot on with the atmosphere. The place sounds a bit up-market, but the seedier working-class pub vaults saw it all on Thursday I guess.

JP/deb said...

love, love the imagery in this one!! definitely agree with Cynthia, the "resplendent kumquats" are over-the-top brilliant!!


magiceye said...

love the vibrance

arabesque said...

i like the 2nd stanza, nice play of words. very poetic indeed. ^0^

Anonymous said...

never before considered kumquats as resplendent. That is a wonderful image.
and a great re-imagining of a scene.

Anonymous said...

Oh, man, I could go for some of that hazy hempsmoke right now. Then bring me somma dem kumquats, eh?

flaubert said...

Love this Susan!
"hemp's hazy smoke" Wonderful imagery.

Ana said...

I like that it ends with a twist (or turn?)...everything sounded so surreal down to the plastic gods :)

Diane T said...

Splendid works and imagery in your poem! Thank you for commenting in my blog!

Linda Bob Grifins Brin Korbetis said...

lovely words,
well organized thoughts.

nan said...

You certainly have set the scene! I can picture it: one single nape in each meaty hand, the hulky bouncer bending those raucous out the door. Great poem!

Francis Scudellari said...

Add me to the list of "resplendent kumquats" admirers, and the fuchsias come in a close second.

Deb said...

So many wonderful word combinations! And I love the use of nape & gape (great words!!) and the repetition at the end to circle back.

Thanks for playing!

Anonymous said...

this piece contains both ease (hemp's hazy smoke) and aggression (meaty hand, hulky bouncer): i love the interplay!

Pearl said...

like the play. your fun shines thru the words.

Joyce Ellen Davis said...

You get better and better! Love the recipes and the pictures. Love fractals!

Anonymous said...

I really like the sounds in this poem (which is so appropriate given the prompt): "hemp's hazy smoke", "bourbon furies // dent a silver shaker", etc, they're just fun to say aloud!

Oh, and thanks for visiting my blog and commenting on my poem for this prompt :-)

brenda w said...

When I was a kid (way back machine is whirring) we used to create hazy hemp "heavens"...uh oh-did I reveal too much? :)

Linda Bob Grifins Brin Korbetis said...


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