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Sunday, October 21, 2007

Two Haiku and Fiery Sunset

For One Deep Breath prompt: 'Closeness'


Four alarm sunset
Hugging tree-pocked mountainside
Flashes unity

clutch of local crones
brown bag Monday at old park
Recall third grade days





Digital Photo courtesy of TKTurner

18 comments:

Christine said...

You inspired me with 'four alarm sunset'. And the second accompanies the prompt vividly.

Rae Trigg said...

I really like your take on the prompt in the first poem (beautiful photo, by the way). The second poem also illustrates the prompt very well.

Greggo said...

these are great. i love 'four alarm sunset'! such a vivid image.

Ron said...

Wonderful imagery here! And who can forget the closeness of our shared experiences?

spacedlaw said...

I prefer the second one best.

Plain Foolish said...

Both of these have such clear imagery... wonderful.

Jane Poe (aka Deborah) said...

Four alarm sunset --- what a great visual!! Wonderful 'ku! Peace, JP/deb

Kellan said...

How lovely - thanks.

david mcmahon said...

As a writer, my favourite is the four-alarm reference. Well done.

Sandy said...

Don't you just love sunsets like that? It makes you want to tell someone about it. And you did!

Barone said...

I love the clutch of crones and brown bag monday lunch...and the sunset hugging the mt. thank you for sharing your work! Jodi

qualcosa di bello said...

sunrise & sunset are my favorite times of the day...you have captured the closeness of night & day and the closeness of sharing the moment so well!

Jo said...

Both are wonderful but the second has pzazz (not got a clue how to spell that puppy and too rushed to check).

AscenderRisesAbove said...

four alarm sunset... i had to check to see if you were near the california fires... (an amazing photo btw)

Fledgling Poet said...

I also immediately thought of the Cali fires, and for a moment felt dread that the beautiful sunset was flames...I'm so glad I was mistaken. Beautifuly poetry and photo, as always!

get zapped said...

Wow, I really love the second one. I can hear the chatter ;)

Abzdragon said...

I love all your poetry... with these two the imagery drew me in and held me. "Flashes unity" -- Great line :)

writerwoman said...

That photo is amazing! I love the first line and the last line in this poem the best. The first is intense and vivid; the last bitterseet and nostaglic.