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Wednesday, December 30, 2009

Poem for RWP #107

ReadWritePoem Prompt #107  An image is offered for this prompt. You can see it at the site!



Ancient Runes

archaic symbols
line the tunnel of time
track the stunning trek

shadows flicker and
obscured by blinded eyes
truth hides in the open

men read and over-write
old runes upon the wall
while the end re-writes the light


 
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23 comments:

Irene said...

Very subtly written. It condenses philosophy into the lines and the ending of the tunnel took by surprise.

Paul Oakley said...

I love the way you recast graffiti as runes, trading meaningful history for marginalized present. Nicely done!

bearlyaudible said...

Simple has its virtues, no doubt at all. Two lines here that I really liked,
"truth hides in the open", how absolutely so!
"while the end re-writes the light"
Thank you for this poem Sue.

briarcat said...

I like this. The last section, especially. That could almost stand alone.

anthonynorth said...

Oh, I love that last line.

Tyra i Vaxholm said...

I wish you a Happy New Year!

Hugs and Blessings/ Tyra

EKSwitaj said...

Beautiful percussive sounds in the first stanza.

Cynthia Short said...

very nice use of the photo to bring in some interesting ideas. Imparting an idea in such a short piece is always admirable to me. I also enjoyed the cadence when read aloud.

Jerry said...

The last lines of each stanza captured my thoughts, kind of like terse summaries of the images that precede them.

By the way, thank you for always leaving kind comments on my posts. That means so much to me!

Linda said...

I love your poem and the direct nature of it. The runes are written but, "the end re-writes the light." I find this thought stunning. Thank you for sharing, Tumblewords and I hope the coming year brings love and beauty to your life!

Dick said...

This poem reads well out loud, providing a pleasing jangle of vowels and consonants. Such an effective match for the picture prompt.

angie said...

oh, this is beautiful!
I love how you turned graffiti into archaic symbols, that men read and over-write. wonderful.

filled with ancient truth.

djvorreyer said...

Lovely sonics in this poem - the hard t's in the first, the r's and w's in the third.

Julie JordanScott said...

Yes. Yes. Yes.

>>>> truth hides in the open

This line is like a hymn, a sacred song of hope.

SandyCarlson said...

How much wiser could we be if we would simply watch and let wisdom reveal herself?

rallentanda said...

Sad and wise and beautifully crafted as always.I give you a little sparrow sigh for New Year!

Jeeves said...

Lovely post. Very Happy New Year!

Karen said...

I really like the translation of graffiti into runes and the abandoned building into a conduit. Very nice take on all of the images in the photo, especially the use of light and shadow.

storyteller said...

I enjoyed catching up this afternoon ... your creativity always inspires. May the new decade bring you and yours joyful opportunities and experiences!
Hugs and blessings,

swapna said...

Happy New Year!

The very first stanza was so vivid in portrayal...it talked about the trek across time so beautifully.

Wayne Pitchko said...

i like this...nicely done and thanks for sharing

evelyn.n.alfred said...

Can you handle one more comment? Actually, the comment I have has been said...comparing graffiti to runes. Nice touch.

Francis Scudellari said...

I particularly love the last lines of each stanza, but the whole poem has so much meaning packed into its brevity.