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Monday, January 14, 2008

Phantom Treasure


phantom treasure, impending wealth
hoarded by limbo in that early pause

trapped in the space of unsteady gray
between dawn and the first ray of light

not be exhumed, not to be refound
phantom treasures that leave no mark






Writers Island Prompt: Treasure

North of Summer, A Decade of Poetry available at my store on Lulu Publishing

32 comments:

totomai said...

lovely sentiments. no mark but forever remembered. sweet :-)

Rambler said...

"trapped in the space of unsteady gray"

TW, the link just struck me...

UL said...

mine is
"not be exhumed, not to be refound", superb Sue..I love how you called it phantom treasure, thanks.

Thinking aloud said...

phantom treasures....brilliant sue..

***trapped in the space of unsteady gray
between dawn and the first ray of light
***
and the images which followed were worth it...it definitely cannot be refound!!!

Herb Urban said...

Your poems are a true treasure, especially over a cup of coffee waiting for the "unsteady gray" to dissolve -- or any time of day for that matter.

gautami tripathy said...

unsteady grey..i have been feeling like that lately...

i loved the title..

Jo said...

oh this is very good, especially the second stanza, so well painted.

Crafty Green Poet said...

that works on several levels, intriguing words

Remiman said...

Sue,
Truly, dreams are a treasures unto themselves.
You see the world through kind eyes!
rel

watermaid said...

Brilliant as ever - well chosen words, perfect line endings. i loved the way you used internal rhyme in the second stanza.

paris parfait said...

Phantom treasure - well done, you! So much to think about in these few lines.

forgetfulone said...

Beautiful poem, as usual! Always enjoy yours.

paisley said...

such is a dream.....

chicklegirl said...

I love the way you turn a phrase: "in that early pause". So nice just to feel the words as I read them.

Preethi said...

This poem is the true treasure.. it was so beautiful..
I loved how you put it.. phantom treasure indeed...

Mary Timme said...

Wonderfully done, with such a wealth of ideas in a few lines. Well done.

Lucy said...

Do you know what I think? Your poems are little treasures I get to enjoy each week! :)

keith hillman said...

Aonther little gem!

Linda said...

I always read your poems several times to get the full effect. They make me think and I so admire your word choices. Yes, dreams are little treasures just like your poems!

Tammy said...

Wonderful poem and I loved that first stanza.

Just Jen said...

I was wondering if you wrote for treasure cuz i was here on sunday. glad you did!

Mad Kane said...

Lovely!

Gilson said...

"trapped in the space of unsteady gray
between dawn and the first ray of light"

... Great way of describing what to me is the most fascinating hour of the day.

Ps said...

Very unusual take.'Phantom treasures'.Read it twice.Liked it both times.:-)

Miscellany Mom said...

Oooo, treasure! I will have to write mine later but I am inviting you to play along in a meme if you would like. Check it out at http://miscellanymom.blogspot.com/2008/01/wish-list-meme.html

Fenny said...

The images coming from this little treasure are breathtaking!

Fenny

LittleWing said...

as always tw your prose is a treasure of words and images..

Robin said...

To me it seems that the treasure is the hidden potential of the coming day.

You have such a wonderful way with words.

get zapped said...

So full of mystery. I love how this flows. Great pic too!

SweetTalkingGuy said...

Yes, amazing! there is a special treasure round about daylight - just before or just after - somewhere in that space between.
I think you have captured it in your 'unsteady gray' reference.

Redness said...

You and your poems are a true Treasure ... Thank YOU!

Sandy said...

I have always liked treasures that on the outside may not look like the typical treasure but to the spirit they most surely are....very nice as always, Tumblewords.

S