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Friday, January 25, 2008

He Brings



the first spring gift,
freshly dying dandelions
cohere in his grimy palm

standing on one foot
then the other, he
immerses stems

in a tall tea glass
creates a quick apology ~
he left the worms outside


Poefusion Friday 5 prompt words: cohere, immerse, create, dandelions, glass

14 comments:

Michelle Johnson said...

Oh the picture that paints. This is really good. I have to wonder what he did to have to apologize. Happy Friday back to you. Have a nice day.

tumblewords said...

LOL, Michelle! He left the worms outside - darn.

paisley said...

the sweetness and innocence of the gesture are certainly stronger than any lingering mud or grime....

Quiet Paths said...

This really took me back so clearly. I'd forgotten how sticky dandelions can be...wonderful piece. Since I garden, worms are my friends!

mariacristina said...

I read this a few times, and then I put two and two together - a little boy is giving his mother gifts! Too bad about the worms! Yuck!

I didn't even think about the words from the prompt - great stuff! you put it all together so smoothly.

Clare said...

Like Paisley said, there is a wonderful sweetness to this that I totally felt as I read your poem. The grimy palm and shifting wait from foot to foot is adorable. And leaving the worms outside gave me a huge smile. Beautiful!
:)

ThomG said...

Wonderful last line.

Jo said...

oh that last line, fabulous, yes a tender lovely piece which made me smile, such delicate structure and flow, perfect.

Just Jen said...

I once washed my son's jeans and there were worms in the pockets, didn't know until I pulled them out of the machine! :D

Clueless Cat said...

lovely poem!

thanks for your comment on my first 3WW :)

Marcia (MeeAugraphie) said...

Priceless, Susan, I can see it as a mastercard commercial to tug at our hearts.

lissa said...

how sweet!

giggles said...

Priceless, adorable, poetry, says so much with so little! Clever last sentence sums it all up!

Hugs Sherrie

LittleWing said...

so very sweet and endearing... makes my heart melt thinking abt my son when he was young .. time just slips through our hands...