collision
brings on wild repercussions
then recedes
perpetual
energy diluted in
one moment
aftermath
hides under ruffled surface
unnerves fish
brings on wild repercussions
then recedes
perpetual
energy diluted in
one moment
aftermath
hides under ruffled surface
unnerves fish
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8 comments:
i love how you carried it to the next level showing evidence that it has had it's own repercussions.... excellent....
I really like the message here but I am curious about your line breaks, the formatting. Is there a particular reason you broke the lines where you did? Did you want the formatting to impact the read in some way?
Thanks, Paisley and Susan. I chose a semi-haibun format, I think! Three haiku linked to an event but, in this particular case, allowed no space between!
I love how it could be any type of collision--the kinds we think of when we think of the word and the kinds we make in our own minds
Thanks for visiting wordsetcetera! I loved this poem. I could see the surf pounding powerfully.
I did not imagine the result of the exercise taking this Japanese inspired turn. It works and surprised me, anything that surprises me is good. Collision is an odd an interesting word choice I will think about it and in celebration I shall collide with a early mood enhancer.
U.P.
I like your direction with this...unnerves fish especially..I could "see" under the water and was happening down where we generally don't "see"!
There is a very Zen-like quality to this poem, along with science based undertones. Very nice indeed.
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