in that interlude
between the start and finish
grotesque shades of change
become quite evident
in this chemistry called life
~when I bend, downward dog,
to tie a shoelace fallen
into a state of wild neglect
my eyes now choose to
close from the bottom up
Poefusion Friday 5 Prompt: grotesque, chemistry, shoelace, neglect and interlude
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Thursday, January 17, 2008
Downward Dog
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hell yes.. that is perfection,.... i am so jealous... i will not even be working on mine till tomorrow and there are already soooo many excellent entries!!!!!
tumblewords
An excellent piece of writing!
the last two lines....AMAZING!!!
loved it :)
Yoga is always so soothing. Don't you wish everything in life could be so simple? I enjoyed this very much. It was beautiful. This line my eyes now choose to close from the bottom up made me think of entering into a calmer place and of giving up. Have a nice day.
Well done.
And Happy Friday!
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Nice, Nice, Nice!
"my eyes now choose to
close from the bottom up" ...wow, you captured it so well. To put it so simply is beautiful...thank you Sue.
Any poem that makes a reference to a yoga pose is on my list of favorites.
Going upside down changes our perspective immediately, and you capture this headspin so well.
as i do yoga, i know what it means..
Ahh..once again I am tickled and awed. Remarkable poem from the word prompts.
Using "downward dog" set the image. You are very good.
I wonder if I remember how to get into downward facing dog? If so will I be able to get back up?
Thank you,
Sherry
beautifully spoken...i can hear the soft spoken calm it brings...
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