Endings are the Same
born with thunder
and the dark of storms
she outruns luck
buys high, sells low
bets on losers
stays 'til the lights come on
curious, she lingers
countersinks all counsel
claps and calls una mas, una mas
shilling for a bettor's win
she deals to change that final finish
hangs 'til the light comes on
Manipulated digital photo.
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I do not understand well this poem....but I like it...:)
Love the words in the first stanza. For some people luck never turns but it just might, one day!
I'd say that I like it, but if there is anger in this sketch, then I'm missing something important.
You've interpreted the prompt wonderfully and constructed a powerful, beautiful piece of poetry. I love that your work is never implicit, but instead, the truths you wish to convey are woven elegantly in your words.
I love the start... born with thunder and the dark of storms....it makes me want to know more.
I don't feel the anger, but I love the piece.
I get more the feeling of a gambler than anger, too.
It really reminds me of us and the oil problem.
Susan
I do not feel anger but this is a beautiful piece!
I feel some sadness though.
Love the part about
'una mas'
Pamela
Although it doesn't seem angry, the person you write about, one who is her own worst enemy, makes me angry thinking of her! So, GOOD!
I think we were all looking for anger, but the prompt was after all 'Emotion', which you've expressed wonderfully.
I like this poem about someone who makes wrong decisions but does not give up,hoping for things to change around.
love the flower in yr header...is that a peony and the beautiful flowers pansys jpossibly photo as well... it's like born under a bad sign...no matter what there you go... it must be hard to go home when the lights come on day after day... somehow im rootin for this gal... great stuff sue.... stirred up
Yes, there is plenty of emotion here. Well executed.
Ok, since I write about the stock market, when I read this I thought your subject was a day trader, only trading at night. Which would make her a loser. But, I'm not sure. It sounds sad. http://lindagoin.com/
This sounds like a trader on the losing end. I sense anger, anticipation, restlessness and hopelessness.
I'm intrigued by the portrait of this sweet person.
wonderfully done,
a character comes to live with your few words.
thank you for the lovely writing...
she learns...
I feel like I know this person! Well done.
Love the sounds in the poem, the ringing that reverberates -- never changes. Terrific!
Yes, the sounds in the last two stanzas in particular had me re-reading this several times out loud.
What I like best about this post: First, the pansy photo. It's excellent. Then the way that the title summarizes the poem without being trite.
Wow. This is so tightly focused. I love it. "born with thunder" is such a great first line. I also love "she outruns luck." So well done, this look of fast livin'.
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