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Saturday, June 12, 2010

Pre-Release for Magpie Tales

Magpie Tales offers an image prompt on Thursdays. Post response by Tuesday morning. Please visit the site to view the image.


hexagons
cupped by honor's round
story sticks

Pre-Release

silent stalwart pick-up sticks
upright in memory cup
wait to sketch the thoughts
she cannot carve

graphite safely disguised
as a functional tool
to dispense those views
she cannot share

erasers nibbled away
tips sharpened time and again
the cup will switch to empty
when her words begin to spill


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27 comments:

Sam Liu said...

I love your unique and stylised descriptions, the wonderful metaphors in this poem are a delight to sample.

Naquillity said...

story sticks... love that. also love Pre-Release. you've brought this prompt to great life. have a great weekend.

kathew said...

"silent stalwart pick-up sticks
upright in memory cup
wait to sketch the thoughts
she cannot carve"
I love this piece!

Sue J said...

Very descriptive. I enjoyed reading it. I love the three lines at the top too.

Annie said...

Ah, how many of us instantly recall the same nibbling, and the chewing and tapping that accompanied our searchs for just the right words.

Aoife.Troxel said...

the cup will switch to empty
when her words begin to spill
...The moment we all long for.

Words A Day said...

I love the last two lines and the truth contained in the poem, that pencils are so much more than functional tools.

pieceofpie said...

dynamite sue... love the words you use so subtle, takes a second glance to absorb...hexagon, round... carve, share, spill... and everything inbetween waiting game

willow said...

I especially like the sound of "silent stalwart pick-up sticks"!

Angie Muresan said...

I very much enjoy this.

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chiccoreal said...

Dear Tumblewords! A most excellent fractal poem; so detailed anc concise in zen-like structure; like Chinese writing built from top to bottom (vertical). Refined definitions of the pencils and pencil holder. Very stirring and mesmerizing imagery. Reminds me of pottery, this building up of words. Amazing how you do this! With much skill and artistry. +++

Carrie Burtt said...

I really enjoyed this one. I love the ending "when her words begin to spill". Awesome Magpie! :-)

Lena said...

....and your own words spill beautifully, too! A joy to read!

Jennifer said...

Wonderful style, TW. I love the idea of a pencil as a tool.

Brian Miller said...

and spil indeed they did...my pencils are covered with tooth marks...no longer shiny. nice magpie!

brenda w said...

the cup will switch to empty when her words begin to spill...

This line conjured a lovely image for me. Then, going back to look at the title, I smiled.

Suz said...

the cup will switch to empty...love that

Nes said...

I guess you're talking about yourself, because those words spilled very nicely. Nice magpie!

Stafford Ray said...

Succinct and witty. Quick and to the point!

rel said...

Sue,
The haiku and the poem so dead on!
you've capsulized the writers thoughts so eloquintly.
rel

Selma said...

Oh yes, yes, yes. You are so insightful. Wonderful on every level. Bravo!

soundoffreedom said...

Nice Magpie..loved these story sticks!

Peggy Jo said...

I enjoy your poetry. Your insightfulness and way with few words are inspiring, thought provoking, and delightful.

Helen said...

A thoroughly delightful Magpie! Pick-up sticks! I love that! Spilling words ... even better!

mypoeticlicense said...

Loved this...sounded wonderful read aloud.
- Dina

little hat said...

That was a beauty Tumble. Very nice indeed. Yes Yes Yes.

little hat said...

That was a beauty Tumble. Very nice indeed. Yes Yes Yes.