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Sunday, June 06, 2010

Flight for OSI







Flight

near the forbidden
chasing sweet dreams of freedom
she soared with no fear
too fast, too close and too far ~
failed wings hold a broken heart


A fractal.
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21 comments:

Quiet Paths said...

I have read this several times and I love it more w/ each passing. Super neat fractal too.

brenda said...

This is a beautiful take on the prompt. I read it several times, and came away wondering if she had regret.

The chase was so darn sweet...until.

Jim said...

Oh Wow Sue! That "she" rated a double take from me!
This is a great little tanka. Disappointment ruled in the end.
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Like your fractal.

Carina said...

I wonder if she fears now...

flaubert said...

wow I can just feel the sorrow in this! beautiful!
Pamela

SandyCarlson said...

I can't get enough of this poem, either. Thank you. I feel that hunger for freedom and the effect of failed wings.

Harshad mehta said...

'too fast, too close and too far ~'

Always dangerous.

Thanks for reminding.

Sweetest in the Gale said...

How beautifully put...we all experience this, don't we? Wonderful words!

Ramesh Sood said...

Perception has always been for perhaps milleniums that freedom lurks near the forbidden..one needs to understand that it's forbidden because wings have often failed in the past..hearts have broken..yet the adventure attracts.. my god where have you led me too.. one of the most beautiful takes on prompt this week.. want to stay here..

anthonynorth said...

That last line is first class.

gautami tripathy said...

Awesome..

help me rewrite Greek tragedies

Also, please do hop on the Monday Poetry Train

Sam Liu said...

A beautiful piece of writing indeed, and very profound. I loved reading this.

Loch Rob said...

Falling into a broken heart. Your poem is simple yet complex in the message and thought provoking nature. I enjoyed this, well done!

Just someone said...

That was really beautiful... love the last line! awesome indeed:)

fourwindshaiga said...

Wonderful, a perfect capture of her character.

Titanium said...

A tale well-told. Love the use of the fractal to frame the pieces of a broken spirit.

rlavalette said...

Great response to prompt. Congratulations on fine work.

rlavalette said...

Great response to prompt. Congratulations on fine work.

Lenore said...

beautifully done

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Naquillity said...

i'm left a little sad when reading this- failed wings, broken heart. but, hopeful too as she did try to find her freedom. maybe she'll keep trying until one day she flourishes.