Flight
near the forbidden
chasing sweet dreams of freedom
she soared with no fear
too fast, too close and too far ~
failed wings hold a broken heart
A fractal.
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Sunday, June 06, 2010
Flight for OSI
Flight
near the forbidden
chasing sweet dreams of freedom
she soared with no fear
too fast, too close and too far ~
failed wings hold a broken heart
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I have read this several times and I love it more w/ each passing. Super neat fractal too.
This is a beautiful take on the prompt. I read it several times, and came away wondering if she had regret.
The chase was so darn sweet...until.
Oh Wow Sue! That "she" rated a double take from me!
This is a great little tanka. Disappointment ruled in the end.
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Like your fractal.
I wonder if she fears now...
wow I can just feel the sorrow in this! beautiful!
Pamela
I can't get enough of this poem, either. Thank you. I feel that hunger for freedom and the effect of failed wings.
'too fast, too close and too far ~'
Always dangerous.
Thanks for reminding.
How beautifully put...we all experience this, don't we? Wonderful words!
Perception has always been for perhaps milleniums that freedom lurks near the forbidden..one needs to understand that it's forbidden because wings have often failed in the past..hearts have broken..yet the adventure attracts.. my god where have you led me too.. one of the most beautiful takes on prompt this week.. want to stay here..
That last line is first class.
Awesome..
help me rewrite Greek tragedies
Also, please do hop on the Monday Poetry Train
A beautiful piece of writing indeed, and very profound. I loved reading this.
Falling into a broken heart. Your poem is simple yet complex in the message and thought provoking nature. I enjoyed this, well done!
That was really beautiful... love the last line! awesome indeed:)
Wonderful, a perfect capture of her character.
A tale well-told. Love the use of the fractal to frame the pieces of a broken spirit.
Great response to prompt. Congratulations on fine work.
Great response to prompt. Congratulations on fine work.
beautifully done
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awards 4 u,
enjoy!
i'm left a little sad when reading this- failed wings, broken heart. but, hopeful too as she did try to find her freedom. maybe she'll keep trying until one day she flourishes.
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