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Sunday, October 25, 2009

Haiku for One Single Impression

One Single Impression: Prompt 87: Elusive





unseen line
between right and wrong
war and peace



hovering
in cold empty plots
starving ghosts



the stalk of loss
lingers in her shadow
withered garden



Fractal created in Apophysis.

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26 comments:

anthonynorth said...

Great words. The first was best, I think.

Amias said...

you represented elusiveness well in these pieces, but like Anthony, I love the first one most of all.

I always love your elusive art ... leaves so much to my imagination.

SandyCarlson said...

I enjoyed these but that third one hit a nerve....Made me think of my grandmother's garden the year she died. How that space spoke to me. How palpable was the love she left behind.

Thank you.

Alisa said...

I liked the lines "unseen line" and "starving ghosts". I was able to see those lines in the image. My impression of the image went front contemporary art to a blurred photograph! Fascinating.

Jim said...

Hi Sue, I like these. Want my ideas?
1. 'Unseen line' is a cold war.
2. Those 'starving ghosts' are not very swift haning around empty plots.
3. That stalk of loss was once a baren stalk of corn before it died in the Fall.
4. Name the fractual? 'Bent and Moving; A picture of blurred metallic sculpture.'

How did the teacher from Texas do?
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jonnia said...

Glad to find your blog. I like it here! These are just elusive enough to make me want to chase them down. The last especially reaches into me.

Mads... said...

heyy..luvlyy post..nice usage of wrde..was nice reading u..:)

Jeeves said...

somehow liked the last one a lot

Tammie Lee said...

1st one: umm hum
2nd: for me, an uncomfortable thought
3rd: so sad

wonderful for this prompt, all three.

lissa said...

I like the third one, there is much turmoil in the words

zoya gautam said...

lovely ..

Jukota said...

Liked them all, very visual with just a few words, but that first one stopped me in my tracks, and I was sitting down! Great job!

Jaime said...

In my experience, it is sometimes hard to find good haikus by writers who understand the power of the individual line as well as the power of the whole. Well done. The last one is my favourite.

Shraddha@theselfloveproject said...

wow...you always make me think!! very enjoyable post!

Patois said...

I can't choose among them. They are all such perfect descriptions of the prompt.

Quiet Paths said...

Once again
really good stuff
soul food.

Kathiesbirds said...

Nicely done! I like the "hovering" the best and it is well suited for this week! Happy halloween!

Life with Kaishon said...

You are so great at this! An absolute poet!

Gel said...

Hi, I love "starving ghosts" and "withered garden" for elusive.

Janet Jarrell said...

Eery - appropriate timing. I would love to know who the 'turner' is - obviously not The William...but a Turner none the less.

gabrielle said...

Beautiful and stirring, all three.
I could feel the unspoken hunger.

Kristy Worden said...

Every time I think about that line between right/wrong etc. I wonder how wide it is... is it so narrow you can be on both sides at once? Is it wide enough to take up residence in and be neither? Or am I just nuts? Hope all is well in CDA, I am great in Boise, see pregnant daughter almost every day and feel useful,
K

fourwindshaiga said...

I like them all, but I am thinking Halloween, so the third hits me today.

Patti said...

very well put- the last two seem rather elusively haunting.... loved them!

Maggie said...

I would find it hard to pick just one from these seeing as how I felt them all in one way or another.

namingconstellations said...

I really liked the phrase "starving ghosts"... definitely three elusive things, but very different in how ephemeral they are. Nicely put!