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Friday, May 07, 2010

Barking for Stars

The first Big Tent Poetry prompt is, naturally, related to the circus.

Barking for Stars

 
Step right up!
Stella's at her best
Step right up!
Stella tracks the stars
Reads your rites
Lines your route to riches
Step right up!
Stella times your life
Shows you when to jump
When to shout
And when to let dogs lie
Step right up!
See Stella at her best
Step right up!

A second swig of gin
From my faux water cup 
Loosens me up
Like Stella never did

Step right up! 



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21 comments:

Amity said...

Stella must have been trained well to the the tricks!

I could only smile with the thoughts u share in this beautiful poem Sue!

Btw, I wrote a poem on Mother’s Day dedicated to my mother and which I also dedicated it to you; being also a Mom like me…please drop by to read! Thanks. Love, Amity…

flaubert said...

Susan,
You have captured the essence here. Nicely done for the prompt.
Pamela

Sam Liu said...

You really get a sense of the excitement and joviality of the circus in this poem.

naramalone.com said...

I love "loosens me up like Stella never did" :)

Nice use of the prompt. I'm just reading along today.

Francis Scudellari said...

I'm guessing that Stella and the barker have a history, and he didn't "let dogs lie" :).

caroleesherwood said...

oh, yes! what it takes to be a performer (and can barkers ever perform!)!

bwarren said...

Stella. Stella. He might prefer gin, but its Stella he can't let go of...

The Emotional Orphan said...

Thanks for coming by my post.
I really like the playful nature of your take on this. Thanks for sharing. Now, about that water cup...

Dale said...

So good to see you at the circus!

rlavalette said...

Yowza, yowza, yowza!

The tongue, liquefied, knows nothing but praise and adulation.

You've stepped right up indeed.

Linda Jacobs said...

I like "Stella times your life" because it's a little bit not what I expected but turns out to be perfect!

lucychili said...

bittersweet

Derrick said...

There must be many intertwined lives and stories in the circus and Stella had a handle on most of them! Enjoyed the touch of gin :0)

rallentanda said...

I am glad Stella ditched him.She is too good for a pisspot who blames her for his (what's a nice way of putting it)inadequacies.

novaheart said...

Good take on astrology here, and the smart simply image (the gin) on seediness of the circus.

Thank you for reading and commenting on mine.

Deb said...

I especially like how the words "bark" in this poem. Great use of language & form to reinforce the idea.

And it is great to have you at Big Tent!!

jasonriedy said...

"Always drink gin with a mark, kid."

Great way to bring out the barker behind the barks.

Linda said...

LOL - great little poem! One of my favorites!

James said...

I love the levels of wordplay in "reads your rites." The refrain is great it's fun to read this in the barker's voice.

Raven's Wing Poetry said...

Such a strong voice here...and interesting how you weaved in the image of the cup of gin. I liked this.

-Nicole

Paul Oakley said...

What an enjoyable read! Thanks!