Two senryu and a near-cycliku
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inner rings
denote a tree's age
lines tell mine
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size is key
when there is none
one is gone
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elderitis
that virtual fever
strikes in the night
elderitis
strikes in the night
that virtual fever
elderitis
elderitis
that virtual fever
strikes in the night
elderitis
strikes in the night
that virtual fever
elderitis
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28 comments:
so simple, so true...!
elderitis! Love it!
A definite new word for the dictionary there :-)
If trees have rings then wrinkles must be our laugh lines.....
I must have laughed too much!
I loved this! so simple, and yet so great! very well done :)
be well
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I like the picture, but I also like the poem, because I was just counting rings on a tree that fell in my aunt's yard.
First one is very good.
I loved the wry humor, and yet the photo adds much, those logs braced and building something that made all the difference so long ago.
Elderitis! What a good word.I like it.
I am not one for writing in forms. I just write what comes to me. I do not have the discipline, but admire people that do. Well done, you. These are beautiful.
elderitis- you are making up words, eh!
Each poem is wonderful.
trees touched us both with this prompt!
I loved all of these, especially 'elderitis'. I'll have to use that word in the future! :~)
Ooooooooh.
How I can relate to this set of witty verses.
;-)
This is marvellous! Elderitis indeed.
A new form for me and I liked it. Well done this week Sue!
brilliant. age-o-phobic!
Lovely little pieces on their own, but they intertwine well...much like the logs in your photo.
a fever burns us up in the dark - tree becomes ashes. I like this :)
Hi Sue, love that word elderitis and the way you did this!
Thanks for the mention and you know, you could enter this on the NaisaiKu Challenge? if you really wanted to...
Love you senryu too, the key one best but love the way you got the first one bang on the prompt!!
Thanks for giving us elderitis and that wonderful repetition. Wonderful, wonderful repetition! And a beautiful trio, too.
Elderitis!! It's not contagious, but I think I have it!
Always interesting, coming over here. :)
i never want to grow old, but i gues everyone feels the same.
perfect poem to fit in with the discussion as always :)
Hiya, thanks for taking the NaisaiKu Challenge? this week! Love your poetry!!
Like the others here, I do like the new word you created, but “size is key; when there is none; one is gone” meant most, ringing clear and echoing my observations of death of late.
Loved the simplicity and smartness of the first one. Good piece as always..
I am so glad I've got elderitis and loving it ;) Thank YOU so much for your kind and generous comments now and always ;)
Hey mate, wont you teach me these new styles? These seems to be too attractive!!
Wonderful compositions ...
Size is the Key!!
I love this response to the prompt--wonderful words!
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