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Saturday, March 28, 2009

Aging for Sunday Scribblings

Sunday Scribblings post#156 -- Aging. Well, we're all as old as we have ever been, and we're all at different stages of considering the aging process. What thoughts do you have on the subject?




Two senryu and a near-cycliku
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inner rings
denote a tree's age
lines tell mine
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size is key
when there is none
one is gone
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elderitis
that virtual fever
strikes in the night
elderitis
strikes in the night
that virtual fever
elderitis
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THE RULES FOR CYCLIKU!
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28 comments:

if said...

so simple, so true...!

Lucy said...

elderitis! Love it!

anthonynorth said...

A definite new word for the dictionary there :-)

Serious Black said...

If trees have rings then wrinkles must be our laugh lines.....

I must have laughed too much!

Tanya Gwen Minnick said...

I loved this! so simple, and yet so great! very well done :)
be well
t

AdellBeek said...

I like the picture, but I also like the poem, because I was just counting rings on a tree that fell in my aunt's yard.

Jeeves said...

First one is very good.

Beth said...

I loved the wry humor, and yet the photo adds much, those logs braced and building something that made all the difference so long ago.

linda may said...

Elderitis! What a good word.I like it.

SarahA said...

I am not one for writing in forms. I just write what comes to me. I do not have the discipline, but admire people that do. Well done, you. These are beautiful.

Tammie Lee said...

elderitis- you are making up words, eh!

Each poem is wonderful.

trees touched us both with this prompt!

Fledgling Poet said...

I loved all of these, especially 'elderitis'. I'll have to use that word in the future! :~)

Linda - Nickers and Ink said...

Ooooooooh.

How I can relate to this set of witty verses.

;-)

keiths ramblings said...

This is marvellous! Elderitis indeed.

Tammy said...

A new form for me and I liked it. Well done this week Sue!

Jennifer Hicks said...

brilliant. age-o-phobic!

angie said...

Lovely little pieces on their own, but they intertwine well...much like the logs in your photo.

Dee Martin said...

a fever burns us up in the dark - tree becomes ashes. I like this :)

SweetTalkingGuy said...

Hi Sue, love that word elderitis and the way you did this!

Thanks for the mention and you know, you could enter this on the NaisaiKu Challenge? if you really wanted to...

Love you senryu too, the key one best but love the way you got the first one bang on the prompt!!

anno said...

Thanks for giving us elderitis and that wonderful repetition. Wonderful, wonderful repetition! And a beautiful trio, too.

jay said...

Elderitis!! It's not contagious, but I think I have it!

Always interesting, coming over here. :)

Tina said...

i never want to grow old, but i gues everyone feels the same.

perfect poem to fit in with the discussion as always :)

Wendy Naisa said...

Hiya, thanks for taking the NaisaiKu Challenge? this week! Love your poetry!!

missalister said...

Like the others here, I do like the new word you created, but “size is key; when there is none; one is gone” meant most, ringing clear and echoing my observations of death of late.

sudharm baxi said...

Loved the simplicity and smartness of the first one. Good piece as always..

Redness said...

I am so glad I've got elderitis and loving it ;) Thank YOU so much for your kind and generous comments now and always ;)

Tan said...

Hey mate, wont you teach me these new styles? These seems to be too attractive!!

Wonderful compositions ...

Size is the Key!!

Karen said...

I love this response to the prompt--wonderful words!

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