Tumblewords

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Friday, December 28, 2007

Wraparound



on hallowed ground
novices perform
a masquerade of plenty

...pave over local ashes
erect phallic rooflines
fingering the faded sky

...chastise the jaded
flail the weary watchers
with their hackneyed play




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11 comments:

Linda said...

Love those phallic rooflines! I'm always amazed by your word choices. You pack plenty in a little package!

Jo said...

fingering the faded sky, what a gorgeous image, very well done.

gautami tripathy said...

Great phrases in there..I can't pick!

Dick said...

Intriguing...

theaccidentalnovelist said...

linda's right, it does pack a punch. was it inspired by the fractal?

I like the sounds of the last stanza, I actually connected it like this:

chastise the jaded
flail...

love that.

BTW - in Firefox browser this page looks odd. Some of the text is off and the left side almost runs off the screen.

anthonynorth said...

Some great words in these.

Linda Jacobs said...

I'm not sure what this poem means but I love the way it sounds. All the Fs in the middle stanza really stand out...like they are supposed to, I guess, when phallic is involved!

Fledgling Poet said...

Rich words, powerfully put together. Wonderful, as always!

SweetTalkingGuy.. said...

First of all, love the poem, its got a great feel to it and then it complements the fractal so well too.

"If you blink your eyes fast you can make the buildings jiggle...."

Julia Smith said...

Your first one is my favorite. I fear we are all guilty of that, most days.

totomai said...

the first one is very powerful. loved the hidden meaning of it