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Thursday, September 09, 2010

Outside In for Magpie Tales

Magpie Tales offers the following image as this week's prompt. Thank you, Willow!

Outside In


cobalt
frames a fading summer
light
bleeds into the double dark
hem
holds tight the wistful vision
sun
warms wood while sinking
black
veils the inner sight
heart
takes cover from voyeurs



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47 comments:

Jim Swindle said...

I like it, especially "holds tight the wistful vision."

Linda said...

Very interesting structure. Took me a minute to follow it. Lovely poem, and yet another unique look at the picture.

Nes said...

Great imagery in your poems!

Stafford Ray said...

'Hiding from voyeurs'. Yes, that is a real need for some who wear a veil.
And we are all voyeurs... a comment on my own Magpie too, in that case looking in at insanity. Thanks for the visit.

Annie said...

You took every single detail of this photo and made an thoroughly engrossing story.

JeffScape said...

Because of the title, I read this forwards, backwards, sideways, outside to inside, inside to outside, right to left, left to right, and completely at random.

I must say, it was kinda fun.

Susannah said...

Beautiful. :-)

Abhilasha-The Desire said...

Another brilliant style.. and helluva creative... and what bful you tumble down in your writings :) another brilliant post

jabblog said...

This is beautiful. I like the construction of your poem - it really makes the reader think.

Deborah said...

Wonderfully written.

Miss Alister said...

This, I dig. The layout is striking and fortifies the meaning. Outside in, daylight to night, a life, vibrant to dull, blossoming to withering, hope born of innocence dying to the pain of living… Well, that’s the joy I got from it, anyway : )

Lydia said...

Sublime. I love the way you used those one-word lines.

Gabriela Abalo said...

I like it, so short and so profound

sukipoet said...

a painter's reflections on the picture. i love the structure as the single word can either be with the line before it or the line after. inventive.

Greyscale Territory said...

Love how one stand alone word unwraps into imagery! Beautiful!

annell said...

Wow! That was nice. Thanks and thanks for your comment.

Naquillity said...

nicely done. have a happy weekend.

Friko said...

a perfect vision, to the eye that sees nothing is hidden.

kathew said...

Stellar
Word play
Vivid images surround

Brigid said...

Beautiful words, lovely images.

Martin H. said...

"..hem
holds tight the wistful vision.." Very nice.

senderupwords said...

love the last line. Great Magpie. Bisous, Love and Light, Sender

Kristen Haskell said...

Great imagery I really liked your poem.

willow said...

I especially like "heart
takes cover from voyeurs". Nice.

Systematic Weasel said...

Awesome work! I love the structure of this piece! =)

-Weasel

Brian Miller said...

love the structure of this...as with jeff i liked playing with this a bit..even reading just the single words...sun black heart...nice mag!

Carrie Burtt said...

Wonderful imagery....great Magpie!
:-)

Reflections said...

Imagery, structure... taking time to absorb all of it, beautiful poem.

Thank you for visiting my blog as well. Always helpful to have input.

Rene/ Not The Rockefellers said...

What a joy.
I loved the way my mind just wanted to run up and down each word
tumbling.
a treat for the senses.

Rene

surbi said...

Different I teresti g.. You gave meaning to almost everything in the view.. Very good magpie..

susan m hinckley said...

Such strong imagery, and I loved the last line!

R. Burnett Baker said...

I really enjoy how you have encompassed all the visual elements, and how each forms one warm thought and vision. A comforting poem!

Rick

goddessdeels said...

I love the structure of this and the image of the light bleeding into the double dark is beautiful.

Tattered and Lost said...

Wonderfully visual without the photo. With the photo quite haunting.

ds said...

I love the way you structured this--it is like having two poems in one."Veiled inner sight"-can relate to that. Wonderful, thank you.

signed...bkm said...

my favourite line "bleeds the double dark hem"....great magpie..bkm

chiccoreal said...

Dear Tumblewords: Brilliant! Wonderful Tumble in the words. Absolutely Perfect! Structure superlative. Excellent way you have with words, my dear!

wondrinsoul said...

Love this! It feels like words tumbling out of my mouth but it all makes perfect sense. Well Done!

Uma said...

This is breathtaking, the form and the words.

spacedlaw said...

Amazing form, and quite mesmerizing.

EKSwitaj said...

The structure of this piece is intriguing. It works well, though I'm not totally sure why.

ninotaziz said...

Amazing! I just love the tight and disciplined structure.

~T~ said...

But I can't help peeking! Great description.

Helen said...

One of the best ...... a great read!

Selma said...

I literally can't move past the image of the cobalt bleeding. It is so beautiful. I am enchanted by it. I can see it in my mind's eye. You have given me a gift today with that image. Thank you.

Miss Nikki said...

I really like this!

thanatosis said...

unique, I like it.