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Friday, September 17, 2010

Weekend Child for BigTent

Big Tent Poetry offers the following prompt words in a Wordle: skirt, child, swarm, debris, dock, evidence, half-eaten, chant, embellish, answer, backbone, temporary



Weekend Child

she chants old rhymes
star light, star bright

a swinging Christopher
and a clingy skirt

fosters half-eaten faith
debris swarms the dash

temporary answers
give no evidence of love

her backbone weakens
behold the weekend child




An Apophysis Fractal.
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27 comments:

pwf said...

I like "a swinging Christopher" it goes along with the undulating shape of the lines. The rhymes are subversive

Julie Jordan Scott said...

this line is delectable... ate every morsel...

>> fosters half-eaten faith
>> debris swarms the dash

your words stir me today...

my big tent poem

Mary said...

Very nicely written to prompt.

I like "a swinging Christopher and a clingy skirt."

Systematic Weasel said...

Wonderful use of the wordle! =)

-Weasel

caroleesherwood said...

i like how this opens. the first two lines make me have affection for the "she" right away. :)

Elizabeth said...

This weekend child sounds oh so familiar. You paint her vividly in so few words. And I love every line and how each one leads to the next. Really good piece,

Elizabeth

Bloggin'withAmanda said...

"temporary answers
give no evidence of love"
So romantic sounding I enjoyed your wordle very much!

irene said...

Swirly feelings.

Tilly Bud said...

'weekend child' is such a good turn of phrase.

Brian Miller said...

very nice magpie...your word plahy is fun...with a serious edge to it...the reading of it is delectable..

EKSwitaj said...

Very playful and original.

Derrick said...

That second couplet has a great sound. Sadness permeates.

gospelwriter said...

I love the brevity of it, the spare, strong word images that together give the reader a whole picture...

flaubert said...

Excellent piece of writing Susan!
Pamela

Jeeves said...

Brilliant lines.. Half eaten faith..Love these words

kelly said...

I love the mood of this and the last two lines especially - how "weakens" and "weekend" work together.

ms pie said...

even for a moment more so for a weekend... she is a picture of the unevenness of contentment... and again tumble great fractal... and again, thanks for coming by and visiting the blog of mine...

Deb said...

Once again your sounds are wonderful ... & love the temporal words that bridge the others: old, temporary, weekend.

And that swinging Christopher to keep safe travels. Terrific.

HisFireFly said...

The picture to the right looks so much like a dove to me.. a bird in flight or something more intangible..

I'll have to check out the wordle when I have a spare moment..

Jim Swindle said...

Very good description. I feel sorry for her...there are so many millions of weekend children like her.

gautami tripathy said...

So very good. As always.

timeless flies search for fries

And do get aboard the Poetry Train every Monday
mornings and thereafter!

Ana said...

winding between love and melancholy

Karen S said...

"She chants old rhymes" -- "fosters half-eaten faith" I love these lines.

Uma said...

There is sadness that sits in every line. Beautifully written.

Jingle said...

authentic and beautiful!

umamaheswari anandane said...

temporary answers
give no evidence of love

What a beautiful sentence....The answers should be given only when it will be in action

Eaton Bennett said...

I've read this three times...third time it hit me, sad little girl. Excellent poetry. :))