Weekend Child
she chants old rhymesstar light, star bright
a swinging Christopher
and a clingy skirtdebris swarms the dash
give no evidence of love
her backbone weakens
behold the weekend child
An Apophysis Fractal.
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Friday, September 17, 2010
Weekend Child for BigTent
Big Tent Poetry offers the following prompt words in a Wordle: skirt, child, swarm, debris, dock, evidence, half-eaten, chant, embellish, answer, backbone, temporary
Weekend Child
she chants old rhymes
fosters half-eaten faith
debris swarms the dash
temporary answers
Weekend Child
she chants old rhymesdebris swarms the dash
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I like "a swinging Christopher" it goes along with the undulating shape of the lines. The rhymes are subversive
this line is delectable... ate every morsel...
>> fosters half-eaten faith
>> debris swarms the dash
your words stir me today...
my big tent poem
Very nicely written to prompt.
I like "a swinging Christopher and a clingy skirt."
Wonderful use of the wordle! =)
-Weasel
i like how this opens. the first two lines make me have affection for the "she" right away. :)
This weekend child sounds oh so familiar. You paint her vividly in so few words. And I love every line and how each one leads to the next. Really good piece,
Elizabeth
"temporary answers
give no evidence of love"
So romantic sounding I enjoyed your wordle very much!
Swirly feelings.
'weekend child' is such a good turn of phrase.
very nice magpie...your word plahy is fun...with a serious edge to it...the reading of it is delectable..
Very playful and original.
That second couplet has a great sound. Sadness permeates.
I love the brevity of it, the spare, strong word images that together give the reader a whole picture...
Excellent piece of writing Susan!
Pamela
Brilliant lines.. Half eaten faith..Love these words
I love the mood of this and the last two lines especially - how "weakens" and "weekend" work together.
even for a moment more so for a weekend... she is a picture of the unevenness of contentment... and again tumble great fractal... and again, thanks for coming by and visiting the blog of mine...
Once again your sounds are wonderful ... & love the temporal words that bridge the others: old, temporary, weekend.
And that swinging Christopher to keep safe travels. Terrific.
The picture to the right looks so much like a dove to me.. a bird in flight or something more intangible..
I'll have to check out the wordle when I have a spare moment..
Very good description. I feel sorry for her...there are so many millions of weekend children like her.
So very good. As always.
timeless flies search for fries
And do get aboard the Poetry Train every Monday
mornings and thereafter!
winding between love and melancholy
"She chants old rhymes" -- "fosters half-eaten faith" I love these lines.
There is sadness that sits in every line. Beautifully written.
authentic and beautiful!
temporary answers
give no evidence of love
What a beautiful sentence....The answers should be given only when it will be in action
I've read this three times...third time it hit me, sad little girl. Excellent poetry. :))
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