OTHERS
scattered pearls
like tarnished silver
mark the trail
gems gone astray
dust-pocked by rain pellets
drowned in swift storms
the familiar fell away
from thinning strands
left nothing safe
who could guess
how long forever lasts
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Friday, August 06, 2010
Others for BigTent Poetry
Big Tent Poetry offers this prompt: Write a poem in a different style than you normally write. Visit the link to see what others wrote!
OTHERS
scattered pearls
like tarnished silver
mark the trail
gems gone astray
dust-pocked by rain pellets
drowned in swift storms
the familiar fell away
from thinning strands
left nothing safe
who could guess
how long forever lasts
OTHERS
scattered pearls
like tarnished silver
mark the trail
gems gone astray
dust-pocked by rain pellets
drowned in swift storms
the familiar fell away
from thinning strands
left nothing safe
who could guess
how long forever lasts
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26 comments:
I wouldn't mind sticking around to find out.
It's always beneficial to extend and change one's style, I find it keeps the writing fresh. And plus, there's nothing better than a challenge. I love your writing style here, it works very well - the poem is marvellous :)
Fine level of compaction & distillation, lady! Bravo.
Great post! Wonderfully written poem!
-Weasel
Well done! It's not easy to write fluently in a style you might not normally choose - you have succeeded admirably :-)
Great use of metaphor. And brevity assures that every word counts.
love the sounds here: I can hear the rain hit and the water run across the land
Yes, I liked it very much! Thank you. But to tell the truth, I'm not sure I have a style, and would find it difficult to write in another style? Perhaps I haven't been writing long enough?
wonderful. have a great day.
Walt Whitman tells us how important it is to honor the Other I Am. Your poem resonates with that reality. Thank you.
Elizabeth
Susan a beautiful piece!
Pamela
I was intrigued that you said "Visit the link to see what others wrote!" and then called you poem 'Others'. So now, I'm thinking of myself as one of the "scattered pearls"! Lovely poem.
Beautiful and rich. Nice work!
I love the dreamlike feeling of this piece which you were to create with such brevity...very good!
Hmm..Had a little trouble accessing comments so hope this doesn't turn up duplicate -- just wanted to comment on the poem -- love the beautiful pearl imagery. Thanks!
Forever is forever...and I am not sure I would like to stay around that long. Nice poem.
Beautiful and thought-provoking poem!
A very enjoyable read!
now it is there, now it isn't
How long forever lasts...Like it....
I think if this is what happens when you break the mold, you should do it more often. :D
Simple and thought-provoking. Great style!
Like the turn about and the wisdom.
Elizabeth
So elegantly written, and I love the that ending.
Beautiful images in a quiet distlled piece. Really enjoyed this piece.
I love your images of loose pearls and tarnished silver. Poignant!
Such a beautiful, vivid image. It's the kind that my mind wanders over and back again.
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