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Friday, August 06, 2010

Others for BigTent Poetry

Big Tent Poetry offers this prompt: Write a poem in a different style than you normally write. Visit the link to see what others wrote!








OTHERS


scattered pearls
like tarnished silver
mark the trail

gems gone astray
dust-pocked by rain pellets
drowned in swift storms

the familiar fell away
from thinning strands
left nothing safe

who could guess
how long forever lasts



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26 comments:

Stan Ski said...

I wouldn't mind sticking around to find out.

Sam Liu said...

It's always beneficial to extend and change one's style, I find it keeps the writing fresh. And plus, there's nothing better than a challenge. I love your writing style here, it works very well - the poem is marvellous :)

Ron. said...

Fine level of compaction & distillation, lady! Bravo.

Systematic Weasel said...

Great post! Wonderfully written poem!

-Weasel

jabblog said...

Well done! It's not easy to write fluently in a style you might not normally choose - you have succeeded admirably :-)

vivienne blake said...

Great use of metaphor. And brevity assures that every word counts.

EKSwitaj said...

love the sounds here: I can hear the rain hit and the water run across the land

annell said...

Yes, I liked it very much! Thank you. But to tell the truth, I'm not sure I have a style, and would find it difficult to write in another style? Perhaps I haven't been writing long enough?

Naquillity said...

wonderful. have a great day.

Elizabeth said...

Walt Whitman tells us how important it is to honor the Other I Am. Your poem resonates with that reality. Thank you.

Elizabeth

flaubert said...

Susan a beautiful piece!
Pamela

Derrick said...

I was intrigued that you said "Visit the link to see what others wrote!" and then called you poem 'Others'. So now, I'm thinking of myself as one of the "scattered pearls"! Lovely poem.

kelly said...

Beautiful and rich. Nice work!

Cynthia Short said...

I love the dreamlike feeling of this piece which you were to create with such brevity...very good!

LD said...

Hmm..Had a little trouble accessing comments so hope this doesn't turn up duplicate -- just wanted to comment on the poem -- love the beautiful pearl imagery. Thanks!

Mary said...

Forever is forever...and I am not sure I would like to stay around that long. Nice poem.

Diane T said...

Beautiful and thought-provoking poem!

gautami tripathy said...

A very enjoyable read!

now it is there, now it isn't

Jeeves said...

How long forever lasts...Like it....

Joseph Harker said...

I think if this is what happens when you break the mold, you should do it more often. :D

irene said...

Simple and thought-provoking. Great style!

Elizabeth said...

Like the turn about and the wisdom.

Elizabeth

Francis Scudellari said...

So elegantly written, and I love the that ending.

Linda said...

Beautiful images in a quiet distlled piece. Really enjoyed this piece.

Paul Oakley said...

I love your images of loose pearls and tarnished silver. Poignant!

Deb said...

Such a beautiful, vivid image. It's the kind that my mind wanders over and back again.