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Thursday, August 26, 2010

Tanka for Magpie Tales 29

Magpie Tales. Willow offers an image prompt each week. Click link to see the picture for this week.



That House

bread crumbs on the step
a small face with mouth of O
peeks out a glass pane
overhead, a cackle calls
one-eyed raven flaps away

 


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34 comments:

willow said...

"Face with mouth of O" made me smile!

Sarah said...

I love it. It made me think of my 3 year old who typically has a very round face with a "mouth of O"

Scribbling Girl said...

wow i loved it!

anthonynorth said...

Great mystery in this.

Stafford Ray said...

Intriguing word pictures ask more questions than they answer... 'one-eyed raven flaps away'. Deformed evil leaving the scene?

signed...bkm said...

Love the one-eyed raven....nice...bkm

annell said...

Those little mischief makers are everywhere, and I love them! Good one!

Angie Muresan said...

Ah, my little one's mouth is always in an O.

Christine said...

What a sweet, vivid and engaging poem! Big fan of "one-eyed raven flaps away" :D

Dianne said...

Ooooo... very clever... Loved this!

Krunal Palande said...

the mouth of O is lovely.

Elizabeth said...

Very brief, but very effective, like the crow touch,

Elizabeth

ninotaziz said...

Perfect from the bread crumbs to the raven flapping away...

Brigid said...

Full of charm Magpie, reminds me of the story of Hansel and Gretel.

Friko said...

one-eyed raven?
A deft touch to make it work beautifully.

Words A Day said...

Love the mouth of O echoed in the one eyed raven - such rich images -

Quiet Paths said...

The wonder of it all...

Wonderful piece.

Systematic Weasel said...

Wonderfully written! =)

Jinksy said...

A flavour of Hansel and Gretel caught in a short form...

christine said...

To me this had an element of mystery.... what will happen next????

Paul Andrew Russell said...

A lovely piece of writing. :-)

Julie Jordan Scott said...

Beautiful and fairy tale like, just as the photo is...

Love it!

My Magpie Tale for this week...

Lydia said...

Absolutely beautiful. One moment in time captured for us to love.

Thank you so much for visiting my blog and commenting on my first magpie. You made my day!

Brian Miller said...

one eyed raven...took a chilling turn there...nicely played magpie!

Greyscale Territory said...

The haiku uses words in such a way that this particular evil atmosphere has an extra twist! The word "cackle" gives the initial clue! Then then the "o" becomes a possible silent scream? Fantastic Magpie!

Linda said...

Nice. I can see the kid peeking out the window. I wonder about that one-eyed raven, though.

kathew said...

one eyed raven! This is great!

Teresa said...

Wonderful. Such a short piece to create a perfect mood to go with Willow's picture!

little hat said...

I liked the raven. It gives me something to chew on. a littel menace at the end.

Bloggin'withAmanda said...

this is really cool. I have not tried my hand at Tanka yet but it looks like fun!I loved your last line about the ravens very fitting

Abhilasha-The Desire said...

Liked the mouth of O.. sweet little devils ..... beautiful poem

susan m hinckley said...

Nice and visual, but still mysterious . . . and I especially liked the title.

Jennifer said...

what did that small face with a mouth of O see? Or should I ask, what did the one-eyed raven see? The abduction of Hansel and Gretel?

You've created marvellous mystery with this tableau TW.

~T~ said...

Intriguing scene!