shaken and stirred
a step ahead of noon
cracked a carton of eggs
for quiche a man could eat
stabbed a slab of cheese
pushed it through a grater
bruised cilantro and dill
and squeezed a leak of lime
skinned two sausage fingers
pinched bloody-red bitters
pummeled the final potion
into a flattened crust of pie
catching his breath by whispers
he slammed the oven shut and
straddled his backward chair
to count the timer down
A fractal image.
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Cooking as a contact sport! Jack comes through with action-packed verbs and a structure to emphasize them. There's something about this poem that makes me see color and hear jazz. It feels like I've had a vacation just watching Jack twice now.
Jack's the lad...!
It DOES sound tasty.
Cilantro... ? Is that Coriander...?
excellent cookery lesson! Perfect description in a minimum of words. Bravo. Can you explain to this maths dyslexic why it is a fractal?
Third attempt at posting this - I keep getting this problem with your and others' blogs. Is it something I said?
I can see it all—the entire act of creation. The last three lines work so well with everything that went before—again I see him clearly counting the timer down.
Some marvelous turns of phrase and words here. So much to savor and now I am hungry to boot!
Ha! "skinned two sausage fingers"--gruesome and hilarious.
Hmmm, if he is a television character, no I do not know him. Good characterization despite my lack of knowledge.
great one!
I like you descriptive detail and focus on a homely chore that also made me very hungry for some reason.
Elizabeth
Susan I love where this prompt took you!
Pamela
Jack Bauer as a hungover chef...what an imagination!
Great idea. The ending is perfect, too. Both the idea of counting down and the impatient patience. (I always have trouble putting into words that way of turning a chair. I like this one)
Love the joyous violence of this. Fantastic!
Wonderful poem, you've really made me hungry :D
So, evidently real men do eat quiche over there. Clever and funny. Well done BB
makes me want some eggs, :) great poem. have a wonderful weekend.
As the poem ends, I can hear the familiar beeping of the 24 clock counting down...I love this poem. Awesome response to what I thought was a challenging prompt.
This is friggin' awesome! Ha! I love the cadence, it trips off the tongue and is so darn fun. well done!
A fun read! I've not eaten all day, so this poem made me hungry beyond hungry. Great post!
-Weasel
Dear Tumblewords: Love this Love in the kitchen!On the table of Love! There sure is something cooking in the kitchen with Tumblewords; is Jack only 24 or is it #24 Jack or is it the Street where the fine Restaurant resides? Either way, this sounds so fresh like a fine gastronomic feast with Jack as an imperative imperitif!Succulent!
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