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Thursday, July 15, 2010

Forty-three Miles North of Soul for BigTent


Big Tent Poetry posts: Our guest maestro’s idea to write using a hidden code  – or any other inspiration from the week.



Forty-three Miles North of Soul


Shucked by his coyoté
he dares the desert
prickly pear and knife-edged grasses
ocotillo spines pinch pieces
from thinning khaki trousers.
He scratched for the trip
with a guide
greed and dreams high-fived
illegal entry, the last illusion.

Crinkled eyes burned by sun
branded by timeworn laughter
he wears optimism
a crown twice the size
of his ubiquitous cowboy hat.

On the promised side
he passes potters’ fields
planted in dust drowned rows
tidier than life, where death
is marked by a white rugged cross
no olvidado, not forgotten.

Watercolor image.
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28 comments:

Stan Ski said...

It reads so well, but doesn't give away its secret...

LD said...

What a great poem and image! Also love your "Z" post wiht the z word I won't attempt to spell. Love finding out things like that.

vivienne blake said...

This is just wonderful. To me, more solid than a watercolour image.

My favourite lines:
"Crinkled eyes burned by sun
branded by timeworn laughter
he wears optimism..."

Rallentanda said...

Something to do with North Korea?

twitches said...

Great phrases here "dust drowned rows"; "a guide/greed and dreams"; "pirckly pear and knife-edged grasses." Reads nicely.

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Gordon Mason said...

Enjoyed reading this aloud! Tongue twisters of 'spines pinch pieces' and 'dust drowned rows' amongst others.

Mory said...

This resembles a cow boy tale. what is the code? i love this poem, each line makes you wonder. I can't wait to decipher it.

brenda w said...

Sue, You had me at coyote. There are a few ways I interpreted your piece. The images it evokes are focused. There is sadness, but also the feeling of a life well lived. Well done!

barbara said...

I have Coyote in mine, too. The trickster, not the human cheat.

Cynthia Short said...

This is so beautifully written, and quite profound.
(I assume it is about a Mexican National crossing over into the US).

flaubert said...

Susan I love this poem!
Is it about the immigrants crossing the border?
Pamela

1sojournal said...

The only thing I can think of is an illegal crossing of the border from Mexico, but failing to reach the final destination 43 miles to the North. Whatever the answer, I really like the poem, its imagery, the mention of the coyote (trickster), and the last line especially.

Elizabeth

James said...

You paint such a vivid scene with this! I love that 2nd stanza--optimism bigger than his cowboy hat is great.

Derrick said...

This reads beautifully Sue. I could only think of Mexican immigrants crossing into the States!

watersword said...

I love the lines
he wears optimism
a crown twice the size
of his ubiquitous cowboy hat.

Linda Frances said...

Your poem reads beautifully. I love the line about daring the desert. It's so evocative.

ninotaziz said...

Dearest Tunblewords,

I have nominated you for the Pink Awards and would be thrilled if you accept it. Thanks!

http://poemsbyninotaziz.blogspot.com/2010/07/in-pink.html

Simply love your lyrical genius.

Cheers and have a great weekend.

Sincerely,

ninotaziz

evelyn.n.alfred said...

Your second stanza is pretty great. I love the idea of wearing optimisim.

Gyanban © said...

The choice of words in these verses are simply outstanding.
The deep sense of pain is so well entrenched that it leaves a mark even after one has finished reading it.

Brenda said...

Beautiful and somewhat scary poem, it's all a risk, that walk, and we've all walked it at points in our lives, and will again- alone. As to what the stenographic hidden code might be, I have no idea -except what the other commenters have suggested, and 'Forty-three Miles North of Soul' can be read as an illegal border crossing (anywhere in the world).

Systematic Weasel said...

Very well written! I am also getting the illegal immigration story from this piece. A great take on the prompt!

-Weasel

Naquillity said...

there isn't a stanza i don't like in this poem. it's great. very visual and interesting.

sorry for my long absence. i've been busy with family, etc... hope all is well.

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one last chance,
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simply reminder, ignore if you dislike it.

u r nominated.

Francis Scudellari said...

This is a timely piece, vividly written. I love the way you describe his optimism, and the tidy death he sees across the border in the "promised land". That hope of being "not forgotten" can be a desert illusion too.

Deb said...

Beautiful homage to a horrid trip. The last illusion, indeed.

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ChrisJ said...

That makes my skin tingle. It is so close to home in our area. Great hopes, too often a sad end. I wish there was a solution.