aged and restless earth
jolts dust and ribbons airborne
flings zealous seraphs
to sing from unsteady ground
zealous seraphs drop
airborne dust and ribbons jolt
aged and restless earth
Fractal image. Here are NaiSaiKu instructions.
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Simply lovely...
"to sing from unsettled ground" is a killer line. Glad Andy is back with the challenge.
As always, an absolute pleasure to read!!
A NaiSai-coup!
Deceptively deep words. Marvellous.
Along with the picture, it scared me and I think that's a good thing
I enjoyed this, and I think I'm beginning to understand the NaiSaiku form a little.
I'm going to enjoy visiting you again! :-) I hope I receive some information about ABC Wednesday before the next "round" begins. I've never participated... so I don't know what a "theme" means.
Nice peace I like it a lot.
thank you for stopping by This Blog Of Mine. I appreciate your comments each week.
Larry
Great use, phrasing and placement of the words. Short and sweet, yet it says much.
Do you need a lot of inspiration to write a NaiSaiKu. Looks more difficult than a Haiku.
Beautifully done, thank you for posting to The NaiSaiKu Challenge?
I love the way you've captured the cyclical nature of things in this piece, and the intelligent use of the 3WW words.
Many thanks for taking The NaiSaiKu Challenge? this week.
This had sucha celestial feel to it - especialy with the image. Thank you for combining such a clever grouping of vivid words!
Like a lullaby - restful yet... there is such a lesson to be heard.
(And thanks for the link to NaiSaiKu instruction. I kept reading about them but had no idea how to write one.)
just lovely!
Seraphs is a lovely sounding word!
Clever NaiSaiKu,
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