Poetic License
prevaricate she does
plasters old platitudes
porous as split peapods
procrastination draws
plethora of lies 'til
processional turns up
posthumous tell-tale truths
Pleiades Form: 7 lines, 6 syllables - each line begins with the first letter of the title
Image is a combination apophysis fractal and digital photo.
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That's a very cool poetic form, and a great use of the words in such a limited space.
You always inspire me with your poems...
Oh, well done! This was too cool. To come up with such a cohesive, impactful poetry, especially in this form is just amazing. I tip my hat to you and cheer!
I agree. This is terse and coherent. I like the final couplet.
I liked liked liked this a lot. I tried with these set of words, in vain!
I had never heard of this form of poetry, but it worked so well using those Pesky P's! (I love it when I learn something new...)
This poem has the delicacy and fragility of one of your sparrow sighs.Lovely!
Terse, precise, and yet still packs a punch!
"Processional turns up"--yes indeed it does. Much too soon.
Hi Liz - Love the simile "platitudes porous as split peapods" and also the form. Thanks for introducing me to it.
Tightly done without diluting the message. Excellent.
I had to teach my students poems this term, it isn't easy when I myself do not appreciate poems.
You are a great poem writer.
The picture accompanying this looks like a stylized drawing of one of our Aussie native flowers. A grevillea.
Re previous post , I love red, but the best ones are the brightest.
well done. i enjoy this form very much. have a great day/ weekend.
Prevailing performance from poet Sue!
I love the image. Your pen in hand so connecting the art to the artist!
Ooh, a form I hadn't heard of, and Pleiades-themed to boot! Thanks for introducing it, I may have to borrow. :)
(Plus, excellent poem: a good portrait of the Process!)
Great form for this prompt. The anaphora reminds me of Whitman's poems, though your brevity and short lines suggest almost an extended haiku. Well done.
Perfectly poetic in the use of form and style. It doesn't take very long for those porous pods to start loosing a few peas, does it? Your image captures a double vision so it is unclear which is the true image and which is a prevarication, even after the funeral..... does reality become a mesh of both? Unique and creative Irene. Thank you for sharing.
The style and use of the "p" words are perfectly placed in this poem Irene. Reflecting on the content, I would concur that it doesn't take long for those porous pods to start loosing all of their peas, does it? The image gives no clue as to which splatter is a lie and which is a true image. After the funeral, the memory will always become a mesh of lies and truths about the departed. I thought your poem was amazing. I am so glad you posted!
Poetic License, yes indeed, and you use it, maximize it...like I would love to be able to relax my head enough to receive from the ether “plasters old platitudes; porous as split peapods.” It looks so good, sounds even better : )
Ohmigawsh. There is a form named after the Pleiades?! I never knew this. I appreciate how you executed it and used all these precarious p's.... and oh, how I adore the feeling in my heart when I am able to see the pleiades.
WOW!
I need to try this form!
THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU!
The Pleiades is a new form for me. Nice work. You packed a lot of poetic punch into such a short piece. I like the image of the "plastering old platitudes porous as pea pods."
from Therese L. Broderick -- Thank your for introducing me to a form I'd never come across! This poem is ingenious -- despite the double restraints put upon it, it works very well!
I didn't know the form either (but nothing new there!). It is so concise and makes perfect sense. I enjoyed the pea pod line as well as the last one.
nicely done....thank for sharing all ppppp words
hi tw... that was a delight to read... those "pz" from RWP challenge awesome!! and again, the whimsical look of the image is a wonderful compliment
I would have thought it even more difficult to add restrictions to the exercise, but you improved it. Pointed focus, crisp, telling.
thanks for teaching me this !!! its wonderful and creative best :)
Very nice poem, just let me do you a suggestion, please do not take it wrong, since you took a poetic license you might want to play a little more with the words, to be less rigid.
Hope it helps, cheers
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