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Sunday, November 08, 2009

Haiku for One Single Impression

One Single Impression: Prompt 89: Departed
Thanks to Loch Rob of A Small Look Inside for this week's prompt, departed.




gold and sienna
lifted away like geese v's
winter's nude branches


skins abandoned
boxes collect her blunders
skeleton keys


in late hours
mistakes moisten her eyes
tide sweeps the sand


Fractal created in Fractal Explorer.
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20 comments:

anthonynorth said...

I love the way you've animated the changes here.

Loch Rob said...

Good imagery in this writing. I enjoyed your haiku piece very much.

Loch Rob said...

Nicely done. Good imagery in your writing too.

Anonymous said...

The last one struck a cord with me this week. The night will do that to us sometimes.

Quiet Paths said...

These are each so different and so good. That last one is so right on that on target just isn't close enough.

Sandra.if said...

very nice......I like specially "tide sweeps the sand"....

zoya gautam said...

.. they are all on target ..

that's why they are good ..

the drama of the second one impacts ..

Amity said...

'late hours, mistakes moisten the eyes'....it always do...


very nostalgic rendition of the prompt, truly departed!

good morning...:)

Shadowplay said...

Gold and sienna... what could be finer than that? I love this visual, especially in reference to lifing and flying free...

Beautiful!

SandyCarlson said...

That second one I feel through to the bone. It is a truth to face.

Jeeves said...

As usual lovely

Anonymous said...

"skins abandoned
boxes collect her blunders
skeleton keys"

Familiar feelings...
I enjoyed this piece very much!

Anonymous said...

The fractal and the geese V's go together well.

Jukota said...

three very lovely haiku - but the last was my favorite - "mistakes moisten her eyes" says so much with so few words.

Jim said...

Sue, I like your last one best.
No, that tide and its lapping waves can't be stopped, no more than can be those tears.
This is very touching.
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Ann, Chen Jie Xue 陈洁雪 said...

I have great admiration for people who write poetry. I have to teach my young students, and they find it hard if they have to stick ti the rules.

Beth P. said...

Like them all, but the last one...ooohhh, can really feel that departure.

Thank you, dear heart!

Beth P. said...

These are all great--really liked the last one, could feel it all the way down...

Many thanks!

Patti said...

loved them all, but my favorite is the first. As much as I love the leaves, I also find the beauty in the bare branches as well.

Geraldine said...

My fav is your first haiku but I enjoyed all of them. The artwork, superb as usual.

Hugs, G