wild ginger lay low
in the space between shadows
wind whistled along
half a note from the shore
white herons danced
while sand hugged the water
two ends of a summer
the middle gone missing
forever lost in the song
bobbing east of all places
Watercolor, East of all Places
Prompt from Writers Island
poetry watercolor
Fractals Photos Poetry Prose Watercolor
Tuesday, September 25, 2007
Key of Sea
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two ends of a summer
the middle gone missing
wow great use of words..
Beautiful. Your use of word and image have me feeling that place when summer is gone... and only that "half a note from the shore" carries the memory...
I like how the two-line stanzas and the rhythm contained within are like waves lapping the shore. Nicely done. I thought of "quay" when I was riffing on the prompt earlier, it's neat to see another sea connection; and tying it in with music really works too. (Funny, I've got a musical connection of sorts in my story as well!)
wild ginger lay low
in the space between shadows
wind whistled along
half a note from the shore
Oh I see this so clearly. It's just lovely....
What a beautiful portrait of a shoreline! I really enjoyed your poem.
This had such a nice flow to it. Great imagery too, I could see it as I read it.
I find it interesting how magical your words are to transport me back to a place long ago.
Of all places...neat! I liked this a lot. Liked the painting too.
I like the way one can get lost in the essence of your writing.
I love the phrase "east of all places" ~and the painting that depicts it. It seems like a magical place, where wonderful things would happen.
Lovely poem:)
Beautiful poem and very soothing to read. :)
Lovely imagery in your poem - really beautiful and the painting is the perfect accompaniment!
Wow magic words. I love Whistled..half a note from the shore. And than the beautiful painting. Thanks
"white herons danced
while sand hugged the water" - wonderful imagery!
great painting too. i love the colors.
I loved the way your words ebbed and flowed! Wonderful use of the prompt.
I have read this over and over. I am fascinated by what you are trying to say. What I really GET is the clear knowledge that where the sea is concerned, there is no control, no beginning, no end. Even the sea shore is constantly shifting and surpising us, much like a musical poem.
Wow, you've done an amazing job of perfectly capturing a moment with this piece. From the first line I feel drawn into your mental landscape. Lovely. Thank you.
every word is just right!
Where DID that middle go? I enjoyed the visuals of your poem..... I love to write about the shoreline and ocean or about the river which I can see from my livingroom....such mystery and intrigue under the water.
thank you for your lovely comments on my blog. I'm touched by them.
wind whistled along
half a note from the shore - this was my favorite snippet as well....
I can hear the melody now...thanks for visiting me today fellow Idahoan. I always enjoy coming to visit you both for your magical poetry and your beautiful artwork. You are inspiring!
Good work! *btw, have you read Sand County Almanac?
Love your artwork, your amazing creativity.
Vivid, beautiful images. The poem feels like falling through bolts of silk.
others have used words like "magical," "lovely," "vivid"...and they're all right. just reading this poem makes me feel warmer and a bit more relaxed. i wish i could be "bobbing east of all places."
Hi Sue! I second what Lucy R.E. said above. I love every word, from the first word of the title (and its play on the key of c) to the last word of the poem. And I love the musical theme -- and the movement and flow -- and all the w's in the first half -- and your utterly spectacular watercolor that shimmers in glorious light.
This seems very musical. I liked each word.
Coming from you, your comments mean so much. Thank you.
Wow ... what a great poem ... every line strong and beautiful ... I'm so envious right now ;)
I loved this. It felt like a breeze in late summer.
Just a lovely thread of words! Colors in the art are simply entrancing!
Hugs Sherrie
Loved it! Beautifully done,
Jo(sie)
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