Playing with different resources while using my own words produced the following:
Cyclone of Stars
Orion's belt rises as he stalks the Pleiades
Andromeda cradle-rocks her stellar nursery
the bleeding hand of tides rises and falls
driftwood kiva reflects in a froth of pool
soft as dandelion parachutes in falling dusk
half an hourglass disguises the end of day
hanging on to the tail of a dream
a snarling wind unboxes a cyclone of stars
built like a house of cards, the light lets go
as if it had never been involved
in the last dregs of the passing
nightjars hieroglyph a song into the dust
A fractal image.
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20 comments:
Oh, that's so pretty. I like how it evolved.
Words are weaved so beautifully into a poem...lovely!
Susan, that is truly scrumptious piece of writing and I love the fractal:)
Pamela
You did a great job of it. Nice art, too.
Beautiful !!
Oh man, absolutely superb. It springs off the page, dripping its beauty as it goes.
Beautifully flowing piece leading to a brilliantly written conclusion. Vb
Just gorgeous.
Oh, this is beautiful...I felt engulfed by the fall of night!
Beautiful... I especially like the last stanza!
~laurie
Love the personifications here.
It is so evocative...
Here is mine:
homing
Love this. Especially
"the light lets go as if it had never been involved"
Whoa! that was simple perfect and powerful
www.thequietone.net
Lovely
That's lovely.
Beautiful images Susan, and what an excellent poem!
Great flow and imagery. Your poems are ever beautiful.
There are so many dazzling word images, it is like the night sky--I'm not sure where to look.
Wonderful imagery. Mad Kane
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