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Saturday, March 12, 2011

Heedless for Big Tent Poetry

Big Tent Poetry offers: Write a poem of science.










Heedless

a punched tin ceiling
stutters with stars
leaks pinpoints
on dry khaki hills

disguises the blind spot
where danger comes
where shadows rhyme
as the darkness grows

heedless of warnings
they cry in the night
their cities displaced
when science shuts down




A fractal image.

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24 comments:

DJ Vorreyer said...

I really like the punched tin image that starts the poem. Everyone's science is different for this prompt!

thingy said...

It's a beautiful poem. : )

I now know what a fractal is. Sort of. : /

Jeanne Aguilar said...

Yes, I agree the punched tin image is perfect...and sets the tone for the ending of them poem when science shuts down. Kind of reminds me of Solomon's tone in Ecclesiastes.

patcegan said...

Intriguing poem and beautiful painting! Thanks! hugs, pat

Deb said...

Gorgeous and foreboding. Terrific lines and images, including "shadows rhyme" and the disguised "blind spot."

Steven Cain said...

"...when science shuts down..."

Brilliant.

flaubert said...

Susan, I love "when science shuts down", beautiful poem.

Pamela

Judy Roney said...

You have a way with words, wonderfully done. <>Incredible scene!

liv2write2day said...

When art weds science/math the result is stunning.

honeyhaiku said...

This is quite intriguing. Love the first and last verses, good begin and a great end!

Selma said...

How do you do it again and again? The image of the punched tin ceiling leaking pinpoints is outstanding. I can't tell you what an impression it has left in my mind. WOW!

LKHarris-Kolp said...

I like "punched tin ceiling" and especially "dry khaki hills" and "science shuts down"... brilliant piece!

~laurie

Brenda said...

The line, "stutters with stars" struck me as particularly beautiful! A short, rich poem with edges, "punched tin" edges.

namingconstellations said...

Well, everyone already mentioned the punched tin, so it might be redundant to mention it again... but I really liked it, reminded me of making candle-and-foil lanterns as a kid. Lovely piece!

patteran said...

'Stutters with stars' - what a powerful image. In fact, that first stanza sets up the other two to powerful effect.

patteran said...

Sorry - 'to striking effect'. Falling asleep here!

Nancy said...

Lovely in its distillation.

sandy said...

There are so many neat images in this piece. It fires up the imagination.

Cathy said...

I agree with other, the punched tin ceiling is brilliant along with the last line

Jeeves said...

Science shuts down!!!Lovely!!

Umamaheswari.A said...

Beautiful poem!

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Erin Davis said...

I agree with those who have already noted the power of the punched tin image and the end with science shutting down. Beautiful.

Mad Kane said...

Wonderful imagery! I really liked it.
Mad Kane

inquisitive-life said...

I so liked the second para. Nice!!!!