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Friday, March 18, 2011

Cabin Fever for Big Tent Poetry

Big Tent Poetry prompts for a poem about being stuck.



Cabin Fever


on the other side
of yesterday
movement sticks

untenable future
unbendable past
a wishy-washy now

the cusp of today rotates
like a dejected pup
re-winds in multi-haze

re-runs and re-casts
the same weak scenes
that time once stopped

she leans into wabi sabi
relieves the pressure
still, movement sticks

 


Pen and Ink sketch.
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20 comments:

Jingle said...

powerful message there,
beautiful delivery.

here is My entry

thingy said...

You are incredible, Tumblewords. I am always blown away by your words and beautiful art.

flaubert said...

I love the last two stanzas here, Susan.

Pamela

anthonynorth said...

So very powerful.

LKHarris-Kolp said...

I adore this one, especially "a wishy-washy now"... so much deeper meaning throughout...

~laurie

versebender said...

Well crafted with a big finish. Vb

rallentanda said...

Interesting poem with wabi sabi relief and sticking movement.Love the tortoise.You can learn a lot from Mrs.Cyclops.

vivinfrance said...

This beautiful poem reads as though you're between a rock and a hard place. If you are, I wish you a swift and permanent excape.

rallentanda said...

PS
Madame Cyclops is the name of Durrell's sweet tortoise in " My Family and Other Animals"

irenet23 said...

I love that aesthetic expressed.

liv2write2day said...

Feels a bit like those moments between seasons...is it winter, spring or the wishy-washy now. Nicely written.

Kim Nelson said...

Your last stanza is very good!

Julie Jordan Scott said...

Yes, I do know movement sticking, too. In my bones.

Thank you for a poem which will also stick...

Crafty Green Poet said...

I particularly like the image of the dejected pup

Cathy said...

untenable future
unbendable past
a wishy-washy now

perfectly written

www.thequietone.net

nan said...

I love the last stanza! This was great.

Kelly said...

the cusp of today rotates...
ah, I love that.

Mad Kane said...

Very powerful. I especially liked this verse: "untenable future
unbendable past
a wishy-washy now"

Mad Kane

imnotaverse said...

Some great phrases in this poem. I enjoyed it.

Jeanne Aguilar said...

On the other side of yesterday movement sticks
I love the opening lines and the entire description of time is fantastic!