Heedless
a punched tin ceiling
stutters with stars
leaks pinpoints
on dry khaki hills
disguises the blind spot
where danger comes
where shadows rhyme
as the darkness grows
heedless of warnings
they cry in the night
their cities displaced
when science shuts down
A fractal image.
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I really like the punched tin image that starts the poem. Everyone's science is different for this prompt!
It's a beautiful poem. : )
I now know what a fractal is. Sort of. : /
Yes, I agree the punched tin image is perfect...and sets the tone for the ending of them poem when science shuts down. Kind of reminds me of Solomon's tone in Ecclesiastes.
Intriguing poem and beautiful painting! Thanks! hugs, pat
Gorgeous and foreboding. Terrific lines and images, including "shadows rhyme" and the disguised "blind spot."
"...when science shuts down..."
Brilliant.
Susan, I love "when science shuts down", beautiful poem.
Pamela
You have a way with words, wonderfully done. <>Incredible scene!
When art weds science/math the result is stunning.
This is quite intriguing. Love the first and last verses, good begin and a great end!
How do you do it again and again? The image of the punched tin ceiling leaking pinpoints is outstanding. I can't tell you what an impression it has left in my mind. WOW!
I like "punched tin ceiling" and especially "dry khaki hills" and "science shuts down"... brilliant piece!
~laurie
The line, "stutters with stars" struck me as particularly beautiful! A short, rich poem with edges, "punched tin" edges.
Well, everyone already mentioned the punched tin, so it might be redundant to mention it again... but I really liked it, reminded me of making candle-and-foil lanterns as a kid. Lovely piece!
'Stutters with stars' - what a powerful image. In fact, that first stanza sets up the other two to powerful effect.
Sorry - 'to striking effect'. Falling asleep here!
Lovely in its distillation.
There are so many neat images in this piece. It fires up the imagination.
I agree with other, the punched tin ceiling is brilliant along with the last line
Science shuts down!!!Lovely!!
Beautiful poem!
Hi,
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You deserve the best!
I agree with those who have already noted the power of the punched tin image and the end with science shutting down. Beautiful.
Wonderful imagery! I really liked it.
Mad Kane
I so liked the second para. Nice!!!!
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