hook gourd purple kiss drooping staircase muddy bitter doll glossy extract pluck
Doll
the muddy river of no return
kisses the bank
where bitter gourds grow
a blow-away bride
tumbling down
a loose rock staircase
hooked by a drooping vine
her glossy purple eyes
and come-hither moue
plead to be plucked
from that vine near
the muddy river of no return
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Oooh, nicely done. I love the first/last line.
Kay, Alberta
Wonderful imagery in this; just love the personality you have imbued the flower with.
A dangerous river--possibly. I suppose exploring that possibility is an intimidating task, even for the flirtatious river and equally flirtatious doll. Great stuff, Sue.
fabulous,,
I always admire your ability in crafting poetry with challenging requirements...
Ah, the idea of the 'muddy river of no return' creates SOME image in my mind! Very nicely written.
I love the opening stanza. We could all be carried away by that river!
Well done! Nice poem! What is this? I've never heard of the Big Tent Poetry Circus. So you get a list of words that you have to use to write a poem? Sounds like a real fun challenge!
Please visit my cat Sara's M-post. She has suddenly become very interested in poetry, perhaps inspired by all of the wonderful poems that can be read through ABC-Wednesday!
Sara Cat's abcWED-round-7-M
This is good stuff. I could see every line, every moment. And the poor doll!
Loved your use of the Wordle.
Amy
Love this story-poem, great imagery and use of the wordle words.
a blow-away bride
tumbling down
a loose rock staircase
Beautiful!
Wonderful imagery...I really like this one! = )
I'd say the blowaway bride met a sad fate.
"the muddy river of no return" *sigh*
Wonderful lines in there...:)
Susan I love what you did with these words.
Pamela
"a blow-away bride"... oh! Lovely, Susan.
Oooh, I love your vibrant watercolor and the word-paintings as well.
Victoria
Oh what a mind-pic this conjures...your words are hypnotic and so evocative Sue. Beautifully written, as usual.
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It's lucky that the bride was hooked by the drooping vine and didn't end up in the river spoiling her wedding day and dress, very enjoyable.
"hooked by a drooping vine", lovely imagery Tumble.
Great idea. Well thought through.
What I love about these wordle prompts is that different people are struck by different words in them. I'm curious--did you start with "Doll" as the title, or did that come about later?
Very vivid, liked what you did with the words
Superb and well-crafted. I am trying to sharpen my writing skills so I can write as well as you...not a wasted word.
I love where you took that group of words!
I really like how the line "the muddy river of no return" brackets the poem!
great poem with the words available! Nice imagery
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