Broken
one moonless night
the train of her dream
crosses a thin threshold
without warning
tracks to the rim of space ~
steams into the wrinkle
puffs of powder
sigh from the
of collapsing worlds
the clouds grow quiet
under the moody chords
of the mourning dove
♥ ♥ ♥
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"puffs of powder
sigh from the broken shape
of collapsing worlds"
I love this.
The train of her dream... pensive, mystical.
Your poem has an air of mystery about it. Lovely imagery.
U cd make a story out of this.
I did enjoy this
One enters a wonderful dream...well done!
A radiant and inexlicable poem. Beautiful!
Beautiful word pictures, I loved the puffs of powder and collapsing words..
Strong images, great sound in these verse.
Best wishes
Ralf
Wow, I love this, mysterious, mystic, the unexpectedness and sadness of collapsing worlds... Wonderfully written.
Intriguing. Like a light that's not at the end of the tunnel.
Very nice.
what images I see. Great Magpie
Haunting images - I especially enjoyed the last three lines
great imaginary! powerful poem
:)
you make crossing over sound so beautiful, romantic...
lovely
I've always loved that wonderful haunting coo of the mourning dove.
So enchanting.
Very complex imagery. Very thoughful and thought provoking.
Tumble, you are an absolute master and stringing together a series of haikus to create lush poetry. I love the imagery here. You have created so much from a simple cracked stone.
A nice write! Thanks
Love the wordplay here. Second stanza is ridiculously good. Love and Light, Sender
Truly a captivating poem Tumblewords....i love it! :-)
Dramatic imagery. I liked it, a lot.
How DO you do it...!? Tumble, you always amaze me with your posts.
brilliant word play and imagery...worlds collapsing...nice...
Loved the puffs of powder and collasping words...brilliant as always..
I liked how this builds up... then at the ends it calms an emotional roller coaster!
'moody chords of the mourning dove' - wonderful words.
Mysterious leaving one wanting more.........
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Lovely..creates a subtly mysterious mood..moves like an elusive dream...
This was really beautiful!
oh so mysterious-love the moody chords of the mourning dove
Lovely, so soft an mysterious.
Your choice of words evoke mysteries unsolved. Beautiful Magpie.
A mystical feel, yet the power of the train... strength to the gentleness of the mourning dove. Nice!
full of wonderful imagery...loved reading this
This is beautiful -- the images are just wonderful.
Deep and full of power ... well done!
So atmospheric! Lovely.
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