I.
A shadow understrokes
the open window
rises, crosses glass,
hides tight against the eaves
frees the pane
for southbound sun.
II.
Shuttered eyes screen the truth
I know the end
before you mouth a word.
Original watercolor edited in IrfanView
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I was very struck by the first line of the second part here. Lovely watercolour too.
I know the end, before a word..
you are truly gifted..
That second part stays in mind.
I like how your poems invoke the seasons and the changes.
I love the imagery your words conjure up in my mind. :)
Hi Tumble,
I see heartbreak and frost.
Rose
xo
Very powerful 2nd verse. I like the watercolour accompanying the poem. Excellent.
Oh wow. You say so much with such spare lines. Hauntingly beautiful.
A very powerful poem and a lovely watercolour. 'A shadow understrokes/ the open window' - a very clever choice of word in 'understrokes' makes this an effective opening. I agree with everyone else about the second verse.
I really liked them both and the watercolor was lovely.
"I know the end
before you mouth a word" Beautiful line...
The paring of those two images (not to miss the lovely third, of course!) is remarkable. Such spare contrast.
Intense! and it would take a book to say more.
It would free the pain, I mean pane, wouldn't it? Good poem.
These were both so beautiful, but I especially loved the first one! Gorgeous. :~)
Nice . . . I just like the feel of the words in my mouth, very satisfying. You obviously put more time into yours than I did mine -- thanks for commenting, by the way!
beautiful watercolor
Hi Sue! Such beautiful words and watercolor! In the first part, there is such a sweet intimacy between the sun and the window. And in the second part, I really like the eyes being the window -- really cool.
:)
This is lovely. I really like the way that the natural interplay between light and shadow moves so deftly into the realm of human relationships. Very, very nice.
oh, i'll read it again n again... beautiful, and the watercolor is gorgeous too. it is nice to have you on delhidreams. pls take care.
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