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Thursday, August 30, 2007

At the Edge


I.

A shadow understrokes
the open window
rises, crosses glass,
hides tight against the eaves
frees the pane
for southbound sun.

II.


Shuttered eyes screen the truth
I know the end
before you mouth a word.




Original watercolor edited in IrfanView

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20 comments:

Crafty Green Poet said...

I was very struck by the first line of the second part here. Lovely watercolour too.

Rambler said...

I know the end, before a word..
you are truly gifted..

gautami tripathy said...

That second part stays in mind.

Brian said...

I like how your poems invoke the seasons and the changes.

Constance said...

I love the imagery your words conjure up in my mind. :)

Rose Dewy Knickers said...

Hi Tumble,

I see heartbreak and frost.

Rose

xo

joezul said...

Very powerful 2nd verse. I like the watercolour accompanying the poem. Excellent.

This Girl Remembers said...

Oh wow. You say so much with such spare lines. Hauntingly beautiful.

Carole said...

A very powerful poem and a lovely watercolour. 'A shadow understrokes/ the open window' - a very clever choice of word in 'understrokes' makes this an effective opening. I agree with everyone else about the second verse.

Tammy said...

I really liked them both and the watercolor was lovely.

Gilson said...

"I know the end
before you mouth a word" Beautiful line...

...deb said...

The paring of those two images (not to miss the lovely third, of course!) is remarkable. Such spare contrast.

Alan Bender said...

Intense! and it would take a book to say more.

Rethabile said...

It would free the pain, I mean pane, wouldn't it? Good poem.

Fledgling Poet said...

These were both so beautiful, but I especially loved the first one! Gorgeous. :~)

Angie Shultis said...

Nice . . . I just like the feel of the words in my mouth, very satisfying. You obviously put more time into yours than I did mine -- thanks for commenting, by the way!

harmonyinline said...

beautiful watercolor

Clare said...

Hi Sue! Such beautiful words and watercolor! In the first part, there is such a sweet intimacy between the sun and the window. And in the second part, I really like the eyes being the window -- really cool.
:)

Jon said...

This is lovely. I really like the way that the natural interplay between light and shadow moves so deftly into the realm of human relationships. Very, very nice.

adi said...

oh, i'll read it again n again... beautiful, and the watercolor is gorgeous too. it is nice to have you on delhidreams. pls take care.