Recipe for a Swing
one high chain shackles
connects two tree trunk cores
loopback rope makes circles
to catch the wooden seat
for pleasure pumping lift
one high chain shackles
stretching toward the sky
in a long smooth swoop
connects two tree trunk cores
she sings the key of happy
riding the rising swingloopback rope makes circles
A Fractal.
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19 comments:
"She sings the key of happy" is a great line! The repetition is like the swing's rhythm!
Susan,
The image of a child on a swing is
delightful. Nice cascade.
Pamela
I agree with Linda, it is like being on a swing. Well-done.
Love the rhythm of this 'swinging' recipe! Fits wonderfully as a cascade!
Nice cascade. I especially liked the joy in the line "she sings the key of happy".
Yes. I too love the lines "she sings the key of happy/riding the rising swing". Nice!
Nice capture! Love the last line. :)
This was a hard prompt, wasn't it? But you did a "swinging" job with it!
Graceful sense of rhythm and balance. Your work with the form came out well, I think.
Oh... how beautiful. I love the entire thing. Images and then, at the end..."oh, the image!"
Love how you took it on...
really enjoying the clause form... it brings out a whole new dimension to poetry... the thought of swinging on a sunny day and singing... it doesn't get any better..
sweet and freeing - pleasure pumping lift - great description of that wonderful feeling of childhood.
I feel sorry for any child that misses out on this wonderful part of their childhood, what lovely writing.
A beautiful cascade. One of the first mother-child activity together is a swing. Depicted very well here.
nicely done.....thanks for sharing this
Ah, so much lovely motion in your word choices. Nice alliteration as well. Beautifully done.
A sure shot recipe! I could see it all.. the swing, the looping..
i really enjoyed this :)
Love this application of "recipe".
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