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Friday, November 19, 2010

Swing for Big Tent Poetry

Big Tent Poetry prompt: Write a cascade poem.




Recipe for a Swing



one high chain shackles
connects two tree trunk cores
loopback rope makes circles

to catch the wooden seat
for pleasure pumping lift
one high chain shackles

stretching toward the sky
in a long smooth swoop
connects two tree trunk cores

she sings the key of happy
riding the rising swing
loopback rope makes circles












A Fractal.
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19 comments:

Linda Jacobs said...

"She sings the key of happy" is a great line! The repetition is like the swing's rhythm!

flaubert said...

Susan,
The image of a child on a swing is
delightful. Nice cascade.
Pamela

liv2write2day said...

I agree with Linda, it is like being on a swing. Well-done.

E. Johnson said...

Love the rhythm of this 'swinging' recipe! Fits wonderfully as a cascade!

Cara Holman said...

Nice cascade. I especially liked the joy in the line "she sings the key of happy".

Robin said...

Yes. I too love the lines "she sings the key of happy/riding the rising swing". Nice!

faith said...

Nice capture! Love the last line. :)

Cynthia Short said...

This was a hard prompt, wasn't it? But you did a "swinging" job with it!

hedgewitch said...

Graceful sense of rhythm and balance. Your work with the form came out well, I think.

Julie Jordan Scott said...

Oh... how beautiful. I love the entire thing. Images and then, at the end..."oh, the image!"

Love how you took it on...

ms pie said...

really enjoying the clause form... it brings out a whole new dimension to poetry... the thought of swinging on a sunny day and singing... it doesn't get any better..

nan said...

sweet and freeing - pleasure pumping lift - great description of that wonderful feeling of childhood.

Bloggin'withAmanda said...

I feel sorry for any child that misses out on this wonderful part of their childhood, what lovely writing.

kaykuala said...

A beautiful cascade. One of the first mother-child activity together is a swing. Depicted very well here.

Wayne Pitchko said...

nicely done.....thanks for sharing this

Kelly said...

Ah, so much lovely motion in your word choices. Nice alliteration as well. Beautifully done.

Alakaline said...

A sure shot recipe! I could see it all.. the swing, the looping..

ladynimue said...

i really enjoyed this :)

EKSwitaj said...

Love this application of "recipe".