Totally Optional Prompts asks: what sort of inspiration did we find this week? In mythology, or elsewhere?
Tattered hair haloes
an age-pocked head
tendons lie loose
on thin-skinned hands,
his whitewashed eyes
haunt a giggle of girls
wearing faux immortality
flaunting tight skin
with come-on strolls
and
overhead
Orion, pinned to the night
like an errant butterfly,
hunts lovelies of the Pleaides.
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Reading this I felt overwhelmed, the ending is beautiful, exquisite, your writing is always exceptional, this goes further still.
I like how the first stands as if seen on earth, blends into the second vista of the night sky. Lovely! I saw the prompt comes from you, so I'm going to try it!
you and jo... your knowledge on this subject amazes me... i had to fight all week with it... and still came up empty.... this was lovely.. and believe it or not not only do i know who orion is... but i know a guy named orion too... small world...LOL
Excellent juxtaposition, I particularly like 'faux immortality'
Oh, you describe those girls so well and the old guy gives me the creeps. Then...the shift to Orion and it all becomes clear. You are amazing!
So mystical...I love it!
this is a fun poem!
Beautifully done, your poem
to me reads organic and surreal
at the same time, what an amazing
unique marriage you've performed!
Myth, culture, mind and stars. They act upon us together.
Excellent.
i liked this one. just caught the prompt, i might attempt it before the month ends..an idea is shaping in my mind..
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