black holes drawing in
mock-ups rimed by jagged rims
synapses splinter
shift about with passing time
fragments line the faulty trail
Willow image.
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Fractals Photos Poetry Prose Watercolor
Monday, February 21, 2011
Tanka for Magpie Tales
Willow at Magpie Tales offers an enigmatic image to draw words from writers. This week:
black holes drawing in
mock-ups rimed by jagged rims
synapses splinter
shift about with passing time
fragments line the faulty trail
black holes drawing in
mock-ups rimed by jagged rims
synapses splinter
shift about with passing time
fragments line the faulty trail
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This is beautifully composed ... and perfect with the photo.
Wonderful..
"fragments line the faulty trail"...
love it :)
I feel splintered reading this. Short and powerful.
Enigmatic verse for an enigmatic photo. Well done.
Mad Kane
I love your interpretation of the photo.
"Synapses splinter
shift about with passing time"
beautiful wordings
Beautifully phrased with great power.
Fragments, indeed. They're always there. Great words.
Very nice response to the prompt.
Well done and very cleverly too!! Each line is well thought and crafted!! Very apt for the image!!
Your words are a perfect description of chaos that seems to be going on.
I like 'synapses splinter' and the idea that there are times our lives don't hold together very well.
excellent- love the line "fragments line the faulty trail"
That is a nice tight poem that really works well with this photo!
classy!
The fragments and the puzzle pieces fit so well together in your work!
disconnection, such a sad state. but what a good magpie!
Nice. The perfect form for this prompt.
Poetry24…where news is the Muse
I can feel the movement, so spare and well done!
"synapses splinter"...a line to move the earth....lovely and strong...bkm
This is lovely... You are such an amazing writer!
Sharp, very well written and beautiful.
fantastic and yes, so perfect for the pic!
This little piece packs quite a punch. Nice.
so aptly written..
Here is my Magpie,
http://poem-myworldofexcitement.blogspot.com/2011/02/poem52a-puzzle.html
"Synapses splinter." Now that's an image! Nicely done!
ohh so much power crafted so brilliant in such less words! kudos!
mock-ups rimed by jagged rims
I liked the rhythm of these words especially.
'black holes drawing in' - very powerful image.
fabulous magpie
your words ring
I like that you chose things from science to create a feeling of distress - black holes, splintered synapses, etc. Very creative!
Love the line 'fragments line the faulty trail', isn't that the truth for all of us, searching for our own fragments, piecing together our lives.
Beautiful words...splintered pieces recast can make a whole new universe..
Stunning imagery powered by wonderful words!!
A magnificent Tanka, Tumblewords..
Kudos!
Wonderful word-smithing!!
Wonderful words express the prompt so well. Nice Magpie.
you never disappoint
love " fragments/faulty trail"
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