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Wednesday, July 08, 2009

Naisaiku for 3WW


ThomG, moderator of 3WordWednesday, offers these three words: transparent, kneel, gloom




transparent ragweeds
kneel ahead of wilding wind
encircled by gloom
they rise, dressed in bright pollen
encircled by gloom
kneel behind the wilding wind
transparent ragweeds



Fractal created in Apophysis, processed in Irfanview.

See NaisaiKu or CYCLIKU! for more information about this form.

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23 comments:

Linda Jacobs said...

I like how you changed "ahead of" to "behind." It makes all the difference. "Wilding wind" is great, too!

ThomG said...

I sneezed while reading this. I, too, liked the little change. Clever.

Kristy Worden said...

Ha! encircled by gloom? I think those nasty ragweed REVEL in their pollen dresses (just kidding, I like the picture too...)

Fledgling Poet said...

Lovely, all of it! But I especially loved 'dressed in bright pollen'.

strattonm said...

'wilding wind'

I enjoy reading seldom used words or expression in poetry, and knowing exactly what they mean (to me) and this is a stellar example to me.

Very fun to read and savor.

Just someone said...

Its a great read! :) I love the words used to create the vivid visual:)

Stan Ski said...

Beautiful description and clever use of 'ahead' and 'behind'.

Michelle Johnson said...

Great naisaiku with its strong visual. Hope all is well.

Jeeves said...

Wow!!!

Gilson said...

Beautifully said, Sue. beautifully said.

Lost Mermaid said...

loved the picture scripted in here :)

Ann (bunnygirl) said...

And then I had a sneezing fit followed by two weeks of sinus headaches...

I love the imagery here. Not many poems so good they make you sneeze.

anthonynorth said...

Some great phrases in this. Excellent, as always.

andy said...

Love it! and the subtle change on line 6... phew!!

upperlefthandcorner said...

Great imagery.

paisley said...

beautifully done.. although i am highly allergic to ragweed and wish they would disappear instead of just become translucent!!!

blushing rose said...

Love the visual & words ... TTFN ~Marydon

theselfloveproject said...

wow..you are astonishingly creative..

very inspiring..

angie said...

lovely naisaiku...and the fractal is beautiful!

lissa said...

nice, excellent job on the Naisiku, you're very good at Naisaiku, love the visual here

Megha said...

narrating poem. Specially the bending giving in to wild wind.

Beautiful :)

pjd said...

Once I realized "ahead" had switched to "behind," it all made very poetic sense. The subtle change completes it for me. Nicely done.

AdellBeek said...

I agree with ThomG, because it just made me want to hold my nose while reading it. I also like the art work.