Opportunity
Quarrel
Service
Shadorma is a Spanish 6-line syllabic poem of 3/5/3/3/7/5
an unknown
opportunity
came and went
no knocking
on the proverbial door
last service notice
American Sentence ~ 17 syllables
Opportunity for service thrives while they continue to quarrel.
~~~♥~~~♥~~~
10 comments:
The Shadorma is quite a delight. The AS is just as fun.
i like your watercolor! should seize those opportunities :)
Yeah, spot on both and the watercolor. Love 'em!
Love this new style. I had never heard of it. It is quite refreshing so I'll have to try it. I always like a challenge. Thanks.
Loved both of these, but I think the American Sentence has the edge.
LOVED the Shadorma! Made my heart beat fast. Your watercolors are beautiful!
I especially like the finality of the last line "last service notice"-all chances are gone.
great job sue on both poem and watercolor!
:)
I admit, I've never heard of a Shadorma so thanks for introducing me to a new concept. Really enjoyed the way you used this week's words and I have to wonder how many times that unheard knock has been on our doors...
I really liked the second one, but both are good.
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