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Monday, August 08, 2011

The Door for Magpie Tales #77





Tess Kincaid of Magpie Tales offers this visual prompt for writers.

Summer Evening, Edward Hopper, 1947


the future leaned
against a half wall of faultless
the locked door
hid what they didn't want to know

bathed in light
wrapped in dreamy visions
the locked door
hid what they'd come to know

sunset fell and morning rose
moths fluttered round the bulb
the locked door yawned
released a puff of careless thoughts

sent the future
reeling, undone and splintered
like the clapboard half wall
where dreams declined to nest

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19 comments:

Laurie Kolp said...

Mysterious... I epecially like the third stanza.

Berowne said...

Yes, there's always a locked door that hides what you don't want to know...

Mystic_Mom said...

The door! Of course the door, love how you brought that element to the fore. Like it...lots!

thingy said...

Incredible write. 'the locked door yawned. released a puff of careless thoughts."

I love that.

Brigid said...

-where dreams declined to nest- I love this line, a beautiful write as always.

kaykuala said...

A door hides and a door opens too , like releasing puffs of careless thoughts... Ah well....

Brian Miller said...

nice..the third and fourth stanzas are esp tight, very nicely writen...oh once the door of careless thoughts are open it is sometimes hard to close...

Mary said...

Well done! I like especially how you used the 'locked door.'

Jacqui Binford-Bell said...

Yes the locked door brings in the depth in this poem. Not just about a pretty summer evening but deeper and darker secrets.

briarcat said...

Yep, I figured there was something else going on, too.

briarcat said...

Yep, I figured there was something else going on, too.

120 Socks said...

Absolutely wonderful - loved every bit of it!

Lyn said...

This really builds with mystery..You caught me at the door...wondering..open/close...

Trellissimo said...

The door got to me too...

J Cosmo Newbery said...

Interesting slant on the prompt. Well done.

ds said...

Locked doors hide everything. And careless thoughts do indeed send the future reeling. Lovely take on the prompt!

Geraldine said...

Oh this is so interesting to read and mysterious too. A great summer work, loved the artwork too. Spot on Sue!

Bee's Blog said...

The locked door that cannot stay locked for ever opening and releasing thoughts and things that have to be faced. Wonderful read.

Tess Kincaid said...

I like the notion of the locked door yawning.