tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post7716427507452355689..comments2023-07-30T07:30:50.256-07:00Comments on Tumblewords: When it Comes for RWP #117Tumblewords:http://www.blogger.com/profile/04279038951489894119noreply@blogger.comBlogger17125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-65397759228678621152010-03-16T14:48:27.468-07:002010-03-16T14:48:27.468-07:00Beautiful brush strokes of feelings that attend ol...Beautiful brush strokes of feelings that attend old age I thought.-IreneAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-34149876777308315932010-03-14T12:51:22.244-07:002010-03-14T12:51:22.244-07:00This quiet poem speaks deeply to me, making me thi...This quiet poem speaks deeply to me, making me think and feel and remember.<br /><br />peanuts in the shell<br />refused to yield <br />I cracked them for you<br />when the failing came<br /><br />These lines brought tears to my eyes. Just a beautiful, great poem.<br /><br />Thanks,<br />ShariShari Smothershttp://slstellingstories.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-74653490117247264352010-03-13T19:01:59.695-08:002010-03-13T19:01:59.695-08:00It is a beautiful poem, a memory filled with sadne...It is a beautiful poem, a memory filled with sadness and remorse. I liked these lines <br />'thickets of remorse <br />entwine with guilt'Uma Gowrishankarhttp://umaathreya.blogsome.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-86534527409183176412010-03-13T10:59:07.219-08:002010-03-13T10:59:07.219-08:00TB, you may think it needs revision, but the feeli...TB, you may think it needs revision, but the feeling is so powerful . . . I wouldn't touch it!<br /><br />Nice work.<br /><br />AllanAllan Coxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18269413509026705846noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-3354226899069713562010-03-12T17:30:48.516-08:002010-03-12T17:30:48.516-08:00wow, tw... loved the three stanzas..each had it...wow, tw... loved the three stanzas..each had it's own vision and when the end came i couldn't help but to gaspone more believerhttp://pieceofpie.wordpress.com/2010/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-28540805835982424152010-03-12T14:44:37.728-08:002010-03-12T14:44:37.728-08:00I do like that beginning image. And the spareness...I do like that beginning image. And the spareness of the "confession" gives it that much more power.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-18769684977278023262010-03-12T14:31:03.696-08:002010-03-12T14:31:03.696-08:00I love the gentleness of the intensity here. It is...I love the gentleness of the intensity here. It is strong but wrapped in soft cloth in mitigation. Very nice.Paul Oakleyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17426789386840488470noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-28144027680176973212010-03-12T07:03:14.805-08:002010-03-12T07:03:14.805-08:00Susan,
What a sad poem. I really like the second s...Susan,<br />What a sad poem. I really like the second stanza, it does capture the feeling of sorrow:<br />"from brown shoots <br />thickets of remorse <br />entwine with guilt <br />regret doesn't pause" <br />Wonderful work!<br />Pamelaflauberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18424439866515694972noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-28973963863316813562010-03-12T05:48:13.604-08:002010-03-12T05:48:13.604-08:00I felt the intensity..
my arms around myself won&...I felt the intensity..<br /><br /><a href="http://firmlyrooted.blogspot.com/2010/03/my-arms-wont-let-me-down.html" rel="nofollow">my arms around myself won't let me down</a>gautami tripathyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04192356825699543613noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-30287673081228735522010-03-12T01:56:55.399-08:002010-03-12T01:56:55.399-08:00Runs deep..!Runs deep..!Tamarind~https://www.blogger.com/profile/06451187175850356692noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-24711756483897172692010-03-11T22:02:07.249-08:002010-03-11T22:02:07.249-08:00I hate just repeating what other people have said,...I hate just repeating what other people have said, but it's true... the shame and discomfort really come through strongly and beautifully here. Well done!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-2088913392084777362010-03-11T18:50:26.811-08:002010-03-11T18:50:26.811-08:00Yes, I agree with the others; intense and amazing....Yes, I agree with the others; intense and amazing.spiritsoflenahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09663418154339084941noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-21952260230343033972010-03-11T18:08:35.127-08:002010-03-11T18:08:35.127-08:00Intense feelings are best captured in a few well c...Intense feelings are best captured in a few well chosen subtle words.<br />Something you excel at.rallentandanoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-80765160816852529752010-03-11T15:16:50.661-08:002010-03-11T15:16:50.661-08:00You convey such a sense of shame & sorrow here...You convey such a sense of shame & sorrow here in these few words. Wonderful as usual!Cynthia Shorthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12386358503730817278noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-30672387912173270162010-03-11T12:46:10.045-08:002010-03-11T12:46:10.045-08:00Nice job for the prompt. Don't you love being...Nice job for the prompt. Don't you love being "prompted?" <br /><br />Nice images: peanut shells, brown shoots, thickets of remorse...yes!Joyce Ellen Davishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13494251587598676788noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-75717652088701897782010-03-11T12:12:31.258-08:002010-03-11T12:12:31.258-08:00So poignant.
I especially enjoyed the images that...So poignant.<br /><br />I especially enjoyed the images that felt, to me, from the throat down. Sitting on the rocker... and the line "from brown shoots<br />thickets of remorse<br />entwine with guilt " fabulous visual elements there...Julie Jordan Scotthttp://juliejordanscott.typepad.com/jjspoetry/2010/03/merely-5-foot-4-get-your-poem-on-117-.htmlnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-89054149967512593382010-03-11T10:20:42.710-08:002010-03-11T10:20:42.710-08:00Deep feeling words. Beautifully expressed.Deep feeling words. Beautifully expressed.anthonynorthhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06680944720744601697noreply@blogger.com