tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post5562570193327138705..comments2023-07-30T07:30:50.256-07:00Comments on Tumblewords: Transliteration for RWP 110Tumblewords:http://www.blogger.com/profile/04279038951489894119noreply@blogger.comBlogger23125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-37355743955249488862010-01-26T16:21:25.067-08:002010-01-26T16:21:25.067-08:00This is quite, quite beautiful.
Fascinating proce...This is quite, quite beautiful.<br /><br />Fascinating processSisterJuliahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02873624518389704137noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-9390131810388664502010-01-23T15:09:47.722-08:002010-01-23T15:09:47.722-08:00great job with this ...especially like doom nibbli...great job with this ...especially like doom nibbling at his marrow...thanks for sharing thisWayne Pitchkohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15376196523487344143noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-47065147293366065642010-01-22T20:27:40.658-08:002010-01-22T20:27:40.658-08:00I'm with everyone else on the nibbling at his ...I'm with everyone else on the nibbling at his marrow line - whew! I loved though, how he tried to join water to water, as though he was trying to preserve the flow. I could hear it all in my head.Dee Martinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05077141911351737390noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-58927533328485108192010-01-22T11:27:58.737-08:002010-01-22T11:27:58.737-08:00I'm with Nathan, that line sings... wow. Love ...I'm with Nathan, that line sings... wow. Love what you did with this!Julie Jordan Scotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06558015761690505791noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-12228337648533474642010-01-22T10:11:53.479-08:002010-01-22T10:11:53.479-08:00I really like the image of nibbling doom. Well don...I really like the image of nibbling doom. Well done!Nathanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11552467037640904091noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-3740286390045863902010-01-22T07:50:44.820-08:002010-01-22T07:50:44.820-08:00Very interesting, your faux translation certainly ...Very interesting, your faux translation certainly did well. You got the inspiration from the original characters or you guess what they sounds like. If the poem is written in Chinese, do you have to hear how it sounds, before you can compose your faux translation.Bradley Hsihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18431719607237852038noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-15137780514922249272010-01-21T21:53:35.501-08:002010-01-21T21:53:35.501-08:00Amazing! Love these lines
and in all those times,...Amazing! Love these lines<br /><br />and in all those times, he knew<br />a growing kinship with the dark<br />and a heady ache for friendly deathJeeveshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02059095696768768954noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-76536441617695135732010-01-21T18:53:31.009-08:002010-01-21T18:53:31.009-08:00This is a very moving poem; I really felt connecte...This is a very moving poem; I really felt connected to the "he" the poem describes, and it has a lovely sound.Kristen McHenryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03467256747399406710noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-91267776704561992252010-01-21T17:46:31.966-08:002010-01-21T17:46:31.966-08:00I love what you did with this tough prompt. The s...I love what you did with this tough prompt. The second stanza with the joinings really resonates for me. Great Job.madeline d. murrayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13956396508529229674noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-45580998603884972892010-01-21T17:02:09.723-08:002010-01-21T17:02:09.723-08:00I like the repetition, how it builds sympathetic r...I like the repetition, how it builds sympathetic reverberating meaning as the poem spreads out. Thanks for visiting my site.Yousei Himehttp://tasmith1122.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-21751628386587137072010-01-21T12:07:52.958-08:002010-01-21T12:07:52.958-08:00What caught my eye especially was the line: "...What caught my eye especially was the line: "the doom nibbling at his marrow". The whole poem was lovely and yet sorrowful, reminding me of<br />someone I used to know. I also like how you played light against dark in this piece. Well done.<br /><br />-NicoleRaven's Wing Poetryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08576438868694047958noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-49533474380141430382010-01-21T10:37:26.956-08:002010-01-21T10:37:26.956-08:00This is wonderful... I like how the second half ec...This is wonderful... I like how the second half echoes the first with the back and forth interplay of light and dark. Much more wistful and pensive than the original, I think. :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-33112221223049877132010-01-21T09:29:48.544-08:002010-01-21T09:29:48.544-08:00This is lovely - I especially love the opening sta...This is lovely - I especially love the opening stanza, and '...doom nibbling at his marrow' is just spectacular.<br /><br />I've never done transliterations before, but have done a lot of homophonic translation, where the poem is 'translated' to similar sounding words in english (or how one imagines the words sound). btw -the current poem on the front page of my website came from a homophonic translation of a Rilke poem.<br /><br />Thanks a lot for posting the explanation,etc. for the transliteration - I'll have to give this a try :-)Kaythttp://www.kaythoch.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-34171801638261981512010-01-21T09:21:14.212-08:002010-01-21T09:21:14.212-08:00from Therese Broderick -- Lovely sounds in this! V...from Therese Broderick -- Lovely sounds in this! Very nice poetic strategies: the contrast of wildest/calmest, the anadiplosis (repetition from one line to the next)of "brook,/brooks" ; and the graceful interlacing of "brooks to river, river to the sea." I like how in the poem, the "he" is not named, but is kept at a distance.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-39501294347986225292010-01-21T07:01:58.899-08:002010-01-21T07:01:58.899-08:00"heady ache for friendly death" is a lov..."heady ache for friendly death" is a lovely way of putting it, and a true expression.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-66101626906479140162010-01-21T06:57:22.904-08:002010-01-21T06:57:22.904-08:00You did a wonderful job with this... so many lines...You did a wonderful job with this... so many lines just mesmerized me. The "doom nibbling at his marrow" is just one of many. Plus, I loved the gloomy, depressing theme...I can't seem to write anything else lately! (must be the low sun and wet weather)!Cynthia Shorthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12386358503730817278noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-30022338239010293392010-01-21T05:21:07.358-08:002010-01-21T05:21:07.358-08:00Well, this is a beautiful poem however you created...Well, this is a beautiful poem however you created it - and having seen the Dutch, that was a challenge!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00861397533660827678noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-50531278136759387622010-01-21T03:40:11.584-08:002010-01-21T03:40:11.584-08:00I've just come from Dana's transliteration...I've just come from Dana's transliteration, which (to me, anyway) evokes images of imminent death. Your piece could almost form a prequel, providing the human context. Whilst entirely different in style, this is equally powerful and atmospheric. Great use made of this excellent prompt. Another keeper, I'd say.Dickhttp://patteran.typepad.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-926246267788544482010-01-21T00:51:35.443-08:002010-01-21T00:51:35.443-08:00Those last three lines are marvellous.Those last three lines are marvellous.anthonynorthhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06680944720744601697noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-61020279461858504292010-01-21T00:13:23.665-08:002010-01-21T00:13:23.665-08:00This is wonderful! What a fascinating challenge.This is wonderful! What a fascinating challenge.jabbloghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12176958811589489979noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-27354662587696632232010-01-20T23:48:22.605-08:002010-01-20T23:48:22.605-08:00Did Robert Anker put it so well?Did Robert Anker put it so well?Stan Skihttp://says-sir-ten.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-35044388111973903762010-01-20T23:47:11.584-08:002010-01-20T23:47:11.584-08:00A fascinating idea - I like your poem. :)A fascinating idea - I like your poem. :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-12274817937449499602010-01-20T22:17:18.894-08:002010-01-20T22:17:18.894-08:00Oh, this is great. I love the "kinship with ...Oh, this is great. I love the "kinship with the dark" and the metaphor of running water. Great stuff!Ann (bunnygirl)http://ampfiction2.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.com