tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post5434861463067950901..comments2023-07-30T07:30:50.256-07:00Comments on Tumblewords: Pleiades for RWP #101Tumblewords:http://www.blogger.com/profile/04279038951489894119noreply@blogger.comBlogger28125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-91806363074812279272009-11-22T00:34:50.307-08:002009-11-22T00:34:50.307-08:00Very nice poem, just let me do you a suggestion, p...Very nice poem, just let me do you a suggestion, please do not take it wrong, since you took a poetic license you might want to play a little more with the words, to be less rigid.<br />Hope it helps, cheersMariana Sofferhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13351209522681966230noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-86703065184923651462009-11-21T23:42:06.768-08:002009-11-21T23:42:06.768-08:00thanks for teaching me this !!! its wonderful and ...thanks for teaching me this !!! its wonderful and creative best :)PS the Pratsiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03244361418371176194noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-51406181661364787082009-11-21T14:54:25.760-08:002009-11-21T14:54:25.760-08:00I would have thought it even more difficult to add...I would have thought it even more difficult to add restrictions to the exercise, but you improved it. Pointed focus, crisp, telling.Debhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14744896385434246402noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-86005475271532440632009-11-21T14:23:35.960-08:002009-11-21T14:23:35.960-08:00hi tw... that was a delight to read... those "...hi tw... that was a delight to read... those "pz" from RWP challenge awesome!! and again, the whimsical look of the image is a wonderful complimentone more believerhttp://pieceofpie.wordpress.com/2009/11/20/holiday-nirvana/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-22429471445273313382009-11-21T13:05:39.500-08:002009-11-21T13:05:39.500-08:00nicely done....thank for sharing all ppppp wordsnicely done....thank for sharing all ppppp wordsWayne Pitchkohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15376196523487344143noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-72350427585806604442009-11-21T06:54:29.493-08:002009-11-21T06:54:29.493-08:00I didn't know the form either (but nothing new...I didn't know the form either (but nothing new there!). It is so concise and makes perfect sense. I enjoyed the pea pod line as well as the last one.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00861397533660827678noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-41422420232561784522009-11-21T01:58:08.982-08:002009-11-21T01:58:08.982-08:00from Therese L. Broderick -- Thank your for introd...from Therese L. Broderick -- Thank your for introducing me to a form I'd never come across! This poem is ingenious -- despite the double restraints put upon it, it works very well!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-50662301301096958632009-11-20T16:03:18.576-08:002009-11-20T16:03:18.576-08:00The Pleiades is a new form for me. Nice work. Yo...The Pleiades is a new form for me. Nice work. You packed a lot of poetic punch into such a short piece. I like the image of the "plastering old platitudes porous as pea pods."Lizhttp://www.blog.elizabethenslin.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-46147944366271247382009-11-20T15:22:10.704-08:002009-11-20T15:22:10.704-08:00Ohmigawsh. There is a form named after the Pleiade...Ohmigawsh. There is a form named after the Pleiades?! I never knew this. I appreciate how you executed it and used all these precarious p's.... and oh, how I adore the feeling in my heart when I am able to see the pleiades.<br /><br />WOW! <br /><br />I need to try this form!<br /><br />THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU!Julie Jordan Scotthttp://juliejordanscott.typepad.com/jjspoetry/2009/11/percolate-again-pleasemy-get-your-poem-on-100-offering.htmlnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-7541841765448419882009-11-20T12:23:10.229-08:002009-11-20T12:23:10.229-08:00Poetic License, yes indeed, and you use it, maximi...Poetic License, yes indeed, and you use it, maximize it...like I would <em>love</em> to be able to relax my head enough to receive from the ether “plasters old platitudes; porous as split peapods.” It looks <em>so</em> good, sounds even better : )missalisterhttp://missalister.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-62852631185396646042009-11-20T12:05:47.479-08:002009-11-20T12:05:47.479-08:00The style and use of the "p" words are p...The style and use of the "p" words are perfectly placed in this poem Irene. Reflecting on the content, I would concur that it doesn't take long for those porous pods to start loosing all of their peas, does it? The image gives no clue as to which splatter is a lie and which is a true image. After the funeral, the memory will always become a mesh of lies and truths about the departed. I thought your poem was amazing. I am so glad you posted!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03241402645242821612noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-48333971239730279962009-11-20T11:58:41.261-08:002009-11-20T11:58:41.261-08:00Perfectly poetic in the use of form and style. It ...Perfectly poetic in the use of form and style. It doesn't take very long for those porous pods to start loosing a few peas, does it? Your image captures a double vision so it is unclear which is the true image and which is a prevarication, even after the funeral..... does reality become a mesh of both? Unique and creative Irene. Thank you for sharing.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03241402645242821612noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-26544891738862815472009-11-20T11:38:42.581-08:002009-11-20T11:38:42.581-08:00Great form for this prompt. The anaphora reminds m...Great form for this prompt. The anaphora reminds me of Whitman's poems, though your brevity and short lines suggest almost an extended haiku. Well done.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-56561928979579204122009-11-20T10:33:00.454-08:002009-11-20T10:33:00.454-08:00Ooh, a form I hadn't heard of, and Pleiades-th...Ooh, a form I hadn't heard of, and Pleiades-themed to boot! Thanks for introducing it, I may have to borrow. :)<br /><br />(Plus, excellent poem: a good portrait of the Process!)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-90119547986211497142009-11-20T09:03:21.465-08:002009-11-20T09:03:21.465-08:00Prevailing performance from poet Sue!
I love the ...Prevailing performance from poet Sue!<br /><br />I love the image. Your pen in hand so connecting the art to the artist!when the musics overhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16266298848244629919noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-22632034290394457452009-11-20T06:38:44.124-08:002009-11-20T06:38:44.124-08:00well done. i enjoy this form very much. have a gre...well done. i enjoy this form very much. have a great day/ weekend.poefusionhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15157059633840032305noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-39549780894615928672009-11-20T04:21:10.446-08:002009-11-20T04:21:10.446-08:00The picture accompanying this looks like a stylize...The picture accompanying this looks like a stylized drawing of one of our Aussie native flowers. A grevillea.<br />Re previous post , I love red, but the best ones are the brightest.linda mayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17426368991644308588noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-64828245483320686952009-11-20T02:53:11.781-08:002009-11-20T02:53:11.781-08:00I had to teach my students poems this term, it isn...I had to teach my students poems this term, it isn't easy when I myself do not appreciate poems.<br /><br />You are a great poem writer.Ann, Chen Jie Xue 陈洁雪https://www.blogger.com/profile/04399207312968010460noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-75445390804549367362009-11-20T01:10:01.729-08:002009-11-20T01:10:01.729-08:00Tightly done without diluting the message. Excelle...Tightly done without diluting the message. Excellent.anthonynorthhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06680944720744601697noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-62482794206340754362009-11-19T23:17:02.952-08:002009-11-19T23:17:02.952-08:00Hi Liz - Love the simile "platitudes porous a...Hi Liz - Love the simile "platitudes porous as split peapods" and also the form. Thanks for introducing me to it.Tamrahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08016702051457729026noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-22888606302221803292009-11-19T21:33:25.403-08:002009-11-19T21:33:25.403-08:00Terse, precise, and yet still packs a punch!
&qu...Terse, precise, and yet still packs a punch! <br />"Processional turns up"--yes indeed it does. Much too soon.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-22800775072828490392009-11-19T21:03:44.540-08:002009-11-19T21:03:44.540-08:00This poem has the delicacy and fragility of one of...This poem has the delicacy and fragility of one of your sparrow sighs.Lovely!rallnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-35708944595438765242009-11-19T20:41:19.524-08:002009-11-19T20:41:19.524-08:00I had never heard of this form of poetry, but it w...I had never heard of this form of poetry, but it worked so well using those Pesky P's! (I love it when I learn something new...)Cynthia Shorthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12386358503730817278noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-60482753280513979602009-11-19T20:12:12.907-08:002009-11-19T20:12:12.907-08:00I liked liked liked this a lot. I tried with these...I liked liked liked this a lot. I tried with these set of words, in vain!Jeeveshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02059095696768768954noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-25694715.post-65785269956836263892009-11-19T19:48:31.150-08:002009-11-19T19:48:31.150-08:00I agree. This is terse and coherent. I like the fi...I agree. This is terse and coherent. I like the final couplet.Irenehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12918979903066830662noreply@blogger.com